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It's My Time (The Election)


She is ready for the Office of the Presidency

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Katie Solis
 
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It's a very inspiring poem. I like what you wrote. I would change feel to feels, and come to comes in order to work on the flow grammatically. Over all good job with your contest entry.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
    Thank you very much. I did change feel to feels. What a simple mistake? Take care.
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Alcreator Litt Dear
 
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This speaks of her attitude to win the office of the US Presidency the White House at any cost, irrespective of rules of election; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
    Thank you very much. May your day be blessed with many Blessings.
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Lucian Carter
 
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Your first line is solid, without falling into cynicism. From there, I get lost.

Also, this is weirdly timed. Over a year after the election are we still talking about Hillary? Or is this some new mystery woman who should be president?

Line two:
She "feels" not "feel"

White House is a proper name, capitalize the H as well as the W.

You message is unclear, thus this doesn't really work as a Senryu. Perhaps it would be clearer in a longer format of poetry?


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
    Thanks for feedback. I will make the changes. Have a blessed day. She "feels" not "feel" took me over my limit. Also, I wasn't thinking about Hillary, honestly, but me! I was trying to meet the requirement with an hour left. Thanks again.
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