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Kiss the Butterflies

for Barb Hensongispaca

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IndianaIrish

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Such a beautiful poem written to a beautiful lady for such sad reasons. Your poem is so lovely, Teresa, and so emotionally moving. I hope Barb finds love, joy, and laughter in the beauty of spring and the comfort of family and friends.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment Written 11-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018

Thank you so much Karyn:) She has at least found peace, I think.

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This was very, very deep. Put tears in my eyes. I didn't know Barb left the site. I heard she was ill.

I found beautiful words for that tug at a reader's heart:
I'll flit
just like the butterflies
who lite upon
silky petals
and spread
their fragrant scent
across the land

How beautiful. I will pray for her.

Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you:) She will appreciate the prayers.

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This is such a wondrous ode to life--I wish people could follow it everyday; the world would be a joyous place full of curiosity and wonder! The only part I wonder about, and I'm sure you used it on purpose, and are more accomplished at this type of work than I am. I'm wondering about the use of "land" twice. Otherwise, a perfect piece, and thank you!!!!!!

Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you so much. Actually I question myself about using 'land' twice and didn't know what to change it to.

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nartoonla

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Indeed, live the day and enjoy all that is good for the heavens gardens are superb but it can wait as earth too offers beautiful gardens and lots of them are around. Live and let live and greet the day with a smile. Good piece enjoyed it.

Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you so much:)

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I did enjoy this one - having written a poem on a very similar theme not so long ago! Lingering on the wayside is really the main point of the journey - at least, I think so!
I hesitated a bit over this stanza:
"I'll flit
just like the butterflies
and lite upon
silky petals
and spread
their fragrant scent
across the land",
wondering if, for the continuity of the sense, you might have meant "who lite upon". There again, perhaps you were harvesting some petals for a potpourri!

Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

I did change that phrase and appreciate your suggestion. I remember your butterfly poem:) Thanks so much.

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I did not realize Barb left the site--wish her well for me next time you make contact, and thank you for creating this tribute. The "butterflies" simile is quite evocative and your repeats for emphasis and "garden in the sky" metaphor is very effective. Smiles- Joan

Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you Joan:)

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This is a beautiful tribute to Barb. A lovely free verse poem. Heartfelt and thoughtful. A perfect picture and presentation to compliment the message. I am sorry to hear Barb is no longer on the site. She will be missed.

Blessings
Janet

Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Barb will indeed be missed. Thank you for the review:)

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Alcreator Litt Dear

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This speaks the moment of going time and waiting for a fly to the biggest garden of peace ever in the sky; well worded, well done. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR

Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you so much:)

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Alexander Vasa

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This is a very pretty poem you have written for your friend. She will love it. All one can do is to live each day to the full, and that's what your poem reminded me of, living each day as if your heaven bound, and kissing butterflies on your way. Ana.

Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you Ana:)

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This is beautiful and clearly a tribute to Barb. You did a great job of developing this and the centering adds and enhances this. Great job and it was wonderful of you to write a verse for her.

Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you so much:)

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