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my firlfriends love me best

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jusylee72
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This is a beautiful essay on love. I think you really nailed the idea of what it means to love and be loved. Your insight is beautiful. I wish you the best in this contest.


 Comment Written 22-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
    Thank you very much. Your review and stars arrived as I'm trying to process the sudden death od a woman who raised my grand children and loved me very much. Thanks so much.
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There is Lust and there is Live. They are not the same. This is a good entry for the contest. Does there have to be live in order for just to exist? No. Desire drives lust. Love is made from affection and devotion. Good poem making people think. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
    Lust does not explain how people stay married for a lifetime, or how women and men can truly love each other without intimacy, but it is the easiest way to explain how some folks initially get together. Thanks for the read,.

reply by Pamusart on 01-Apr-2018
    I think we agree. Lust is not Love. They are separate. Many couples evolve into Love when at first it was only Lust. Lust can accompany Love. But, no relationship can survive on just Lust.
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This was a very touching tribute to your friends. I can really feel the sense of friendship in your words. I was right there along with you through all three depictions, and it seems you characterized each friend very poignantly and matter-of-fact so that the reader could have no doubt all the information is true.

It does need one more good proofread. Here's a couple glitches I found:

"one of the first woman" (women)
"Marriage is a private contract, nut in my mind," (did you mean "nut?")
"My absolute favourite took place shortly after arriving in Canada as a pregnant immigrant refugee" (This makes it sounds like you were the pregnant refugee, but I think it was Ivana")

Anyway, very expressive and concise narrative you made here.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
    Thanks so much. .Will look at your suggestions. My oops, I guess.
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I think you've plumbed the meaning of this contest to its very core, there is a vast difference between the love of a spouse, and the love of same gender, the expectancy and intimacy is vastly different, one is empathetic and deep, the other is more gender dependency. Well done, an excellent post and entry. Good luck, blessings, Roy
Typo : after (a) while these moments get stale.2: and (of) I go back that far. If? 3: not (terrible) eloquent. Terribly?


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
    Right on all three edit suggestions. Corrected. Thanks. One day I may write about my important friendships with men as ide from lovers. There are some interesting dynamics in opposite sex friendships, but when achieved, they are equally precious.

reply by royowen on 01-Apr-2018
    I agree, great detail you scribe, well done
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I really enjoyed how you started out in reference to the men in your life but switched to the three important women, describing how you met them, how you got along etc. I think it was rather ingenious to do this, because you loved them and in return they loved you in a unique and supportive way. Very well done, thank you so much for sharing and Good Luck in the contest.......Just three little mistakes that I picked up, sorry if I offend you, but being a contest entry it might be important.....I didn't understand this part, I think it is a typo ' private contract, nut in' AND 'asides' I think you meant sides. AND 'and of I go back that far'-perhaps IF.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
    Hey, I love my unpaid editors. Thanks for the alerts and read.

reply by aryr on 01-Apr-2018
    You are very welcome on both accounts;
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I think this is a good entry for 'The Women Who Love Me' writing prompt.
I think there may be a few slips though:
nut in my mind - 'but' in my mind
after while these moments - after 'awhile'
and of I go back that far - 'if' I go back
that pull us towards - 'pulls' us
Maybe all that's important remains to accept is the gift of loving and being loved - this one seems a little off to me.
Sharon


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
    I appreciate your input--very much. Thanks.
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