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Go Leafs Go


Who is in charge of the remote control?

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prettybluebirds
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Hey, where have you been lately? I have missed your presence on this site. This is a clever story and looks like a winner to me. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 24-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
    My head was buried in the sand. Thank you.
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What families don't have some form of dysfunction. Wouldn't it be something if we could choose our parents. What makes your story is the dialogue and depth of plot in so few words.


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Ain;t it the truth. I think I've tried to be a better parent simply because mine were tragically deficient. Thanks.
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Hello, Spiritual Echo, :)

Nice nick. I have seen you here before. I like your short story. I was a bit confused as to what happened, but I'm sure everyone will be. Maybe you could write this as a novel?

Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
    Flash fiction is meant to confuse with a twist at the end. Thanks.
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Great picture selection for your short story. The reader really enjoyed reading this short story that is filled with imagery.


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
    Thanks very much.
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This is as twisty as it comes. I have a feeling the judge will take the same attitude as the arresting officers.

Just the boys watching each others' backs, as thick as thieves?

An intriguing Flash Fiction.


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
    thank you very much.
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damommy
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Well, that was an extreme reaction. I bet next time he lets her watch what she wants.

Great story told in so few words. Really took me into the scene.


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
    I appreciate your review. Thank you very much.
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SE,

Hey, girl. Sorry, but I have to tell you this really didn't work for me in practice. In theory, the premise is a cute one, for sure. But I was thrown off by Jenny's description of David in the top half -- of his eyes and how SHE was frightened of HIM. That seemed to make everything lop-sided, as if she had good reason, you know?

Not sure about this one. Of course, it was well-executed, just needs tweeking, imo. Thanks and good luck!


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
    I was trying to relate the glazed look of hockey fans, and mislead the reader, but if it didn't work for you, then likely it needs more work then time will allow. Thanks for the review.
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You did a great job with this 105 Words Flash Fiction contest entry. I am not a sports fan but know many that are and can imagine an argument over watching 'the' game game or 'Dancing with the Stars', another program I could never get into. Ah, people are a mixture of oddities and sadly, this could, and probably has happened. I wish you all the best in this contest. It is so good to have you posting again. You have been missed my dear friend.


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
    It's a real challenge. The typing is easy--the imagination doesn't run out--but editting is a real bitch. If I could only type with some accuracy.

reply by Sasha on 20-Apr-2018
    My mother suffered from retinal degeneration and it was so difficult for her. I have it in left eye but I am already blind in that eye. It has started in my right eye but my doctor say it appears to be the slow developing kind and probably will not be a problem for at least 20 year...I'll be 92 so, as long has he is right, I consider myself lucky.
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Hi There, It's great seeing you back writing and then with this great flash story with a heck of a twist. Just as it should be. I hope you'll do well in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
    Thanks so much, Ulla. Sorry my reviewing is almost impossible. Waiting for an audio app on here. LOL
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Hi, Spiritual Echo, and I'm glad to see some writing from you. This is very dark and hard-hitting. Although the husband might have sounded threatening, it was the wife who actually struck the blow. I lost sympathy for her with her remark at the end. The daughter's account of the circumstances behind the wife's hitting her husband doesn't take into account the nuances and what grievances might have been simmering. Very vivid descriptions. Die-hard sports fans are not to be denied. I'm glad my husband isn't a big sports fan. Excellent work with this and you create a chilling scenario. judi


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
    Thank you very much.

reply by judiverse on 20-Apr-2018
    You're very welcome. Hope you're doing well. judi
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