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A Forever Gift


A frightened boy grows up

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prettybluebirds
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Another excellent writing, my friend. I'm so glad you are back with us again. I haven't done any writing this year, but may start a bit later. I have some health issues to clear up and my husband require full time care.


 Comment Written 24-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
    I have macular deferation and reading has become almost impossible. I'm fighting back with some writing. Thanks.
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This is a lovely story. Very touching. Aiden was lucky to have loving family around him to help make up for hot having a mother. I've seen this happen before, but children are so resilient.

I know you were a blessing to this little boy. While teaching him life's lessons, he also taught you some. 8-)

(McDonald's) missing a 'd' on the end.


 Comment Written 23-Apr-2018



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    He sure was and is a blessing in my life, even with his current BLUR hair. LOL. Thanks for the alert.
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This is a wonderful true story, a very touching story that you have executed with excellent prose. I could empathise as well as identify with this story even if I'm still eons away from being a grandparent. But if I ever become one, I'd like to be able to repeat you:

>>I know I won't be here to see how it all turns out, but loving a child, this child, has changed my life and rocked my world. Loving Aiden unlocked my heart and left behind more than enough room to cherish each of my grandchildren that followed, each one an individual and very special spirit.<<


 Comment Written 23-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
    Perhaps it will be a long time until you reach senior status, but if you have a living grandparent, do try to talk to them as you would someone your own age. Inside, I'm still the person I was at 18 with a whole lot of experience and a modest amount of wisdom. I'm sure your grandparent has a lot to offer that could enrich your life. My greatest compliment is the fact that Aiden, a teenager now, trusts me with his secrets.

    Thanks for reading.
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Ingrid, your writing is phenomenal. You and I have very similar experiences regarding our grandchildren. One of mine in particular, my sweet Sarah. My dear son had had complete custody of her since returning from Iraq and she share many common experiences your Aiden has. She too, is 13.

I am blessed to have all of them in my life and I do marvel at their strength and also, their loving ways. I, too, marvel at my three sons who are exceptional Fathers and my eldest son who is a single Father to 6- 4 little ones from 13 to 2. In fact he is cooking them dinner as we speak. He enjoys it immensely though I have offered to cook!! lol..

thank you for sharing..you and I have a lot in common..we must talk one day..

best wishes with the contest..

jimi


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Wow! Shall we play yentas and do a little matchmaking? Except for the geography, I can't think of a better in-iaw to add to my small family. Thanks for the stars and do enjoy your dinner..

reply by jlsavell on 22-Apr-2018
    Forgive me Ingrid, what is Yentas? Matchmaking? Lol... I am way past the masculine persuasion. History dictates I haven?t been to great a judge of character nor values.. lol...as if you needed to know that about me.. too much info Jimi!!!

    No, we will just have coffee or wine and watch an intense movie!!!

    I would like to talk to you. We have a lot in common regarding our family.

    Jimi

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    A yenta--an interfering grandmother, A Jewish term fairly common up here. No, I meant matching up our grandkids. LOL.

reply by jlsavell on 22-Apr-2018
    Oh!!
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Knowing the hard journey you, your son, and grandson have been on brought tears to my eyes reading this. Your reference to not being here to see how it all turns out, was hard to read. You have been a marvelous role model and grand mother and you have so much to be proud of. i am proud of you too and knowing Aiden is growing into a beautiful young man warms my heart knowing how much you being there helped him. I looked for spags but did not see any. Excellent entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Thank you, Sasha. His caregiver, AKA surrogate mom, stands beside me , in the same page. We both did a great jon, but we had some good ingredients to work with.

reply by Sasha on 22-Apr-2018
    I meant to add that I love the title "The Forever Gift"... really lovely.
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Tangled fingers toward the end of paragraphs nine, Ingrid. So glad to know how things are progressing. Aidan had benefitted so much from your consistent caring and attention. The fine dining didn't take, huh? We'll, he can at least honestly say he doesn't like something. He's certainly tried it, thanks to you. You're a great Grandma, Ingrid. Hugs. :) Nancy





 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    You know what, Nancy? I think I am a great grandma and I am so grateful for the closeness between us. Thanks for the alert and stars. I have Macular Degeneration and its made it very hard to read.
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Awe,this is such a heart tucking write. I sure hope you'll be around long enough to see him getting settle in life. But you're right, so much can happen after that. Nothing is a given. I mean, I've just divorced at the age of 65, and I'm happy about it!
her absence was not unexpected and seemed to have little impact on Auden. = Aiden.
Good luck in the contest. All the best.Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Just caught that typo. Better late then never, and I sure hope you remember what YOU like instead of what you chose as a couple. Thanks for the review.
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I think this is a good entry for the True Story writing prompt.
Your story about your motherless grandchildren is touching and well told.
One little slip, Auden instead of Aiden.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Thanks for catching the typo. Much appreciated.
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A great entry for the True Story contest. Aiden's 13th birthday made a good time to reflect on his life. From your account, it seems that he had a long way to go to overcome the rejection by his mother. He has learned to make adjustments, such as better eating habits, and seems to have accepted the fact that he can't count on her. Fortunately, he has other people who love and care about him, such as Grandma. It must be bittersweet to see all the changes in him and realize that he is rapidly becoming a young man. Your son must be exceptional to give so much attention to his son and daughter. Well presented narrative, and it certainly has emotional appeal. judi


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    My son has never wavered in car or love. Thank you for the review.

reply by judiverse on 22-Apr-2018
    You're very welcome. He surely has done a great job. judi
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There is so much of this broken home scenario anymore. IF couples get married it seems the first crisis in their life splits the family up. Many couples don't bother to get married so they can live off of the Wellfare checks that come every month. We have been visited by a couple today that have just become parents again to their grandchildren.
Sad. This is an uplifting story. Well done. Nancy

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018



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    If this couple had stayed married, it would have been far worse. She's definitely a pyschopath. Thanks for the review.
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