This is a well contained story about a sudden break up. Ralph sounds like a selfish man to leave his family destitute and possibly homeless in order to have an affair.
Who knows if the new relationship will last. Is the man leaving her bedroom her brother? The picture kind of looks like she is having and affair also.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
No, dragonpoet! That is her husband who is leaving her. Thanks for stars. Contest ended about 2 months, ago, and, of course, I lost again, as usual, because I didn't have enough votes from people. CHECK out my other writings! thanks liberty justice
reply by dragonpoet on 23-Jun-2018
Don't mention it, Liberty I have lost every contest I entered too. I just enter them now because I think more people read the contest entries than regular posts and I like trying different forms.
You have written a poignant and heart wrenching tale about betrayal. I would mention that you didn't introduce the person with narrative voice. It would have been nice to place them in context. Thanks.
Hello, good writing for the 'what happened' prompt, and best of luck with this well-written entry. I thought your story was obviously very sad, and I notice you have written it for a friend. I hope she's moved on, and your comments suggest, she has. I noticed no errors and have no suggestion for making your story better.
Thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
Thanks so much, Anastasia, for your comments and lovely stars!