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Different Time, Different Place 11


THE DOUBLE-FEATURE CONCLUSION... part eleven

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Hi G. All's well that ends well in this interesting tale of Flint's quest to get back home and the hospitality of the Indians who aided him. Lots of weaponry used within your piece which prompts the question--are you for them or against them? So much these days is written about trigger happy people. Flint seems to be one of those, rather than having dialogue with the opposition to straighten out his dilemma he kills them. Is there indeed a purpose for weaponry or not? Are there some instances where they are warranted or not? Is this a humorous whimsical tale of a cowboy in Oz or does the story have a deeper meaning to contemplate? I may be the only person asking these questions, so just feel free to ignore them. I personally think that weaponry is an okay thing when in the hands of responsible people.

Your story is well written, interesting, and descriptive throughout. Marilyn


 Comment Written 20-May-2018



reply by the author on 20-May-2018
    I find the use of firearms blatantly absurd, if I'm honest. There's no real need to have them, despite the 'defence' argument put forward. It was made an amendment at a different time and place (pun intended) for specific reasons which are no longer really factors these days.

    The character of Flint is pretty two dimensional, here and in the other story I wrote. He blindly sticks to shooting/hacking his way out of most situations, sort of how the NRA and gun-toters blindly cling to that right despite the real damage weapons can do...
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G., this is breathtakingly amazing. I read it with a smile throughout. I'm grateful I stuck with your series and read it in sequence.

I love how you took the familiar, for example, the gate keeper from the Wizard of Oz film, and give it a twist:

Flint shot out a hand and grabbed the little fella's hair, dragging him through the hole, and depositing him roughly on the ground. A boot on his chest held the diminutive man in place. "The key... if you please."

Bravo.

One of my favorite Oz scenes was the horse of many colors. I thrilled that the horse made its appearance here, but with a Flint twist:

Grabbing a handful of silvery mane, he swung himself upwards and onto her back. Flint and the twinkling, purple steed rode out into the sunlight to the gasps of those in the street.

You also contrast gun-toting, tomahawk-throwing fighting style of Flint with the antiquated fighting style of the royal guards. You give us more blood than the MGM film could ever imagine:

Flint circled round, being careful not to trip over any of the bodies currently leaking fluids over the yellow brick road.

The big reveal offered the twist of the Wizard of Oz being an Indian. Just when I think I know where your story is going to go, you surprise me.

One thing that struck me was the confirmation that Flint went on a quest:

I treated your wounds, but it was not enough. You needed a clarity... a purpose. I sent you on a journey all warriors must take."

I feel satisfied and entertained when I finished reading and was thrilled that your story ending with Flint riding off into the sunset. This is masterful and imaginative storytelling.

Thank you for sharing.


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reply by the author on 20-May-2018
    Many thanks Andre. I was sad to bring this one to a close. G
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I love your talented, entertaining, and so enjoyable story, G. You wove the characters and action from Oz into a western story that is a pure delight to read. The ending is fun and I think just perfect! I hope you send this off to somewhere for publication.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)


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    I was sort of sorry to end this one. lol G
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Hi G, this was a wonderful read and wonderful writing. I loved the adventurous story of Flint and how he found his way back home after all, or where he wanted to go go. A twist in that ending as well.
In your notes: A huge tank you to those ... = A huge thank you to those... All the best. Ulla:))


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reply by the author on 16-May-2018
    Hey, tank is how I pronounce that word... lol

reply by Ulla on 16-May-2018
    I see!
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Great job in keeping us guessing what would happen next with your interweaving bits of Wizard of Oz and the western tale. Peyote, huh? Hmm. Possible, I guess.


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reply by the author on 15-May-2018
    Who knows what happens when you're off your head? lol G
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This was an exciting and unpredictable story. I love the ending with Flint waking in the tepee and the braves who appear to be characters embodied in the "dream" of Oz. And Flint gets both the ruby boots and a horse of many colours to remind him of the experience. Now he's off to Utah? I'm sure it will be very dull for him and he'll move on quickly.



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    I don't know. I hear there's a lot of strangeness in Utah... lol

    All the best
    G
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Excellent conclusion. I was curious as to how you'd handle the Wizard. Great job.
Can't help but wonder what you might conjure up next now that you've destroyed the Wizard of Oz LOL.


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reply by the author on 15-May-2018
    Well, I've destroyed a few nursery rhymes and other fairy tales in the past but this was the most fun. lol G
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Good morning, Gareth

Enjoyed the post. This one was extremely long (over 3500 words), but I stayed with it. Flint's character didn't disappoint. No matter where he goes or whom he meets there's always death, blood and guts. Having a Native American as the wizard was then having Flint wake up in his tent then attributing his trip to the peyote was spot on. I liked how you adapted every major aspect of the story to fit Flint's character.

I mean this with the utmost respect. Being a psychology major, Flint's one solution to everything, and with no seeming regrets for his actions, enters into the realm of the psychotic. Well done Looking forward to your next story.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray


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reply by the author on 14-May-2018
    It isn't actually over 3500 words. You're counting the blurb at the top. lol

    Yeah most people would have split this into three parts. It's actually just over 3100 words, but I did warn everyone at the top it was a double-feature. lol

    Flint is pretty psychotic, although there is a softening here with his relationship with the tin man and then when he picks up the child in the Indian camp

    Much appreciated as always, G
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I've destroyed enough trees to make a million wanted posters. --great image that fits in with the western hero.
For me, foreshadowing begins when the horse starts to change colors, magic stick.
Ironic that he is rescued by Indians thanks to the tomahawk.

"Last thing I remember I was in Kansas. There was a storm..."-
shades of Dorothy again.

Love the reference to a quest. Flint has found inner peace.


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    Many thanks for sticking with this one the whole way through. I had so much fun. I love writing Flint and he'll be back later in the year without a doubt. lol

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    He must be your alter-ego. :-)
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I cannot begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this entire story. You crafted a beautifully written,delightful, fun exciting story that kept me riveted to the screen from beginning to end. Definitely worthy of stars.


 Comment Written 13-May-2018



reply by the author on 14-May-2018
    Yeah, people who've liked this one have loved it. I've had about fifteen who've read every instalment and about ten who've been regular...lol I've really enjoyed it myself. Best time I've had writing for some time.

    G
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