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Free verse

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Gert sherwood
 
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Hello YNWA
I must say you used excellent and creative words to show us the beauty of birth the part of going into the Butterfly room I was in awe
Gert


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
    Thank you so much Gert

reply by Gert sherwood on 06-Jun-2018
    You are welcome YNWA
    Gert
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WOW! BRAVO! Now that's what poetry is about, dear friend. Absolutely breathtaking. This entire poem has such beauty, that first stanza, I must say, is exquisite, I was in awe and got a chill to read such perfection, truly outstanding! I loved this poem. Your talent certainly shines through your words. Good luck in the contest, I haven't seen anything ever to come close to comparison. If this doesn't win 1st place, I'm throwing in the towel on FS, lol. ~Kerry


 Comment Written 02-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
    What a lovely review Kerry, thank you so much for such kind words
    Mitchell

reply by Kerry Robinson on 05-Jun-2018
    My pleasure:))
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Great read here... The birth of a child changes everything... I think a child equalizes us and gives a lesson on unconditional love. Beautiful Really. Yours, diana


 Comment Written 22-May-2018



reply by the author on 26-May-2018
    Thank you so much Diana
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bob cullen
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Where to begin. I suppose first I should admit I'm not keen on free verse. But WOW. This is truly awesome. I kept wanting to stop, it's free verse. But the words not only demanded my attention they held my focus. This is what good writing does. Well done YNWA and thank you for proving me wrong.


 Comment Written 22-May-2018



reply by the author on 26-May-2018
    What a wonderful review, thank you so much Bob
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OMG this is so well written and very moving. You say it is General but it sounds convincingly biographical - the measure of a good poem. Your use of metaphor and simile add poetry to the story. I loved it - a wonderful entry to the contest. Warm regards and good luck - Dorothy


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reply by the author on 26-May-2018
    Thank you so much Dorothy for such a wonderful review
    Mitchell
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This was a sad and poignant poem about a mother and child who are struggling, each in their own way to survive. It was heart wrenching the way you describe the child, the way she looks and the toll that's being taken. This is how I read it...am I close?


 Comment Written 21-May-2018



reply by the author on 26-May-2018
    Quite close....father and child......a wonderful review, thank you so much
    Mitchell
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This is, quite simply stated-- even though the piece is riddled with incredible similes and outrageous words, foreboding images, beautiful heart-stopping ones--flawless.
You had (me) with the first line, and you never let up--never let me wait to see the next gem! Brilliant!


 Comment Written 21-May-2018



reply by the author on 26-May-2018
    Thank you so much John for such a heart warming review
    Mitchell
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Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the Free Verse writing prompt.
Your verse tells a clear story.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon


 Comment Written 21-May-2018



reply by the author on 26-May-2018
    Thank you so much Sharon
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Hi Mitchell I think you are the best free verse writer on this site you always seem to create with your words such emotion in your story and this is no exception. You capture all the feelings and angst of a father saying good bye to a baby. Your decriptive style makes the reader re read several times to really grasp all the essence in your poetry.
I am not a fan of free style except yours as it is always worth reading.

( I did a free style poetry workshop afternoon in my home town yesterday to try and understand this style and it was worth the time to do so you meet all the requirement of good free verse. ) Thanks for sharing this poem Cheers Christine


 Comment Written 21-May-2018



reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
    Hi Christine, thank you so much for such a wonderful review, you have really cheered me up.
    Mitchell
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A deeply moving, soulful, heart-wrenching poem from your incredible, creative and breathtaking pen. F/ck me mate, I have missed the pleasure and awe that comes when reading your stunning poetry. This one will bring many to tears mate, awesome write!
I just pray this is not biographical...


 Comment Written 21-May-2018



reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
    Thank you so much Hitch, your kind words have lifted me after last weeks result.
    Mitchell

reply by Hitcher on 03-Jun-2018
    A gutting result for sure mate, what a f/n nightmare goalkeeping display. I was thinking of you when I was watching it : ( Hitch
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