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All that glitters (50 words)

He didn't see the footprints.

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flylikeaneagle

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flylikeaneagle - Nancy Ann Gee

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Excellent

Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Dallas: this could be a start of a murder mystery. Why
did the hand grab his ankle if it was cold and buried?
So much to say in the rest of the novel.... Enjoy dancing
on the keyboards.

I wrote three quick NaNoWriMo each within a month. Now,
I'm studying writing techniques and going backwards to edit
the novels. I'll fly back and read more of yours. Visit anytime.
flylikeaneagle

Comment Written 26-May-2018

reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thanks for the great review. I am much slower than you. It took me a year and a half to write my book. But it was a tougj write. Shaking the Family Tree. A poetry/memoir about the genetic predisposion for alcoholism.

reply by flylikeaneagle on 27-May-2018

Keep writing, Dallas. I'm having to read novels.
I will be editing my novel and sharing on FS. Enjoy dancing on the keyboard and sharing. flylikeaneagle

reply by the author on 27-May-2018

:-))

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Ooh, I'd like to read the rest of this story. Clear setting and personality of main character. Originality (The 20-carat diamond bracelet damn near blinded him) Implied ending.

Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 25-May-2018

Thanks, Shari.

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nancyjam

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Wow! Great twist to get the reader's
attention. Clear, concise writing is what makes
this short piece work.
Good luck in the contest. It
should do well.
Nancy

Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thanks for the great review

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giraffmang

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Hi there,

Nice job with this one. A neat bit of horror flash. A bet he darn near crapped his pants...lol

Does exactly what flash should.
All the best
GMG

Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thanks for the great review.

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Michael W Hogan

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I like the way you think...and write, Dallas01. Read at night with the imagination running wild, it requires a double-dose from the sandman to achieve sleep. Bravo! Michael

Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thanks for the great review.

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nancy_e_davis

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Yike's! It seems the corpse doesn't want to give up the treasure. That would give you a fright! Great entry for the contest. Well done Alice. Good luck! Nancy

Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thanks, Nancy

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Wow! Great job, Alice. This should win the contest easily. You should write more prose, my friend. You have very good imagery and tight sentences in this 50 word excercise. Bravo! I wish I had a six left. Good Luck with it. Bob

Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thanks, Bob. Years ago spiritual echo tried to convince of same. I am leaning now to memoir and flash fiction.

reply by Mastery on 23-May-2018

Just remember memoirs do not sell...unless you are a celebrity or other famous person. Best to write a memopir as I did as fiction based on true events and use the omniescent POV. Bless you, Alice and Good Luck. Bob

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Good point Bob. Thanks for the tip

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Sandra du Plessis

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A very well-written fifty-word dribble flash fiction. Some people seem to never find true luck, there is always something to spoil the wonderful experience of having some luck.

Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thanks for the great review.

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Exceptional

This work has reached the exceptional level

Well, that's two contests tonight that I would vote for someone else's work - LOL. This is FABULOUS - wouldn't you just SCREAM? Hahahaha! In fact, even though it's so tiny, it is exceptional in every way. (I am going to run out of sixes again... *sigh*) LOL.

Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thanks, Dawn. Appreciate the great review
Thanks for the great review.

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 23-May-2018

You're most welcome.

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Swampfox1

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Not bad at all for 50 words. This should be a good entry for the contest. The last line is pretty cool as the fleshy hand curled around his ankle. That's an eery find with a metal detector. LOL. I did not find any errors. Thanks for sharing.

Comment Written 22-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thanks for the review

reply by Swampfox1 on 23-May-2018

you're welcome

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