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Looking for Lea


a mother's anguish -- 483 words

  38 total reviews 
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Joan E.
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Your storytelling was captivating and I did not anticipate the provocative conclusion. Adding the Brother Michael character made for more intrigue. Well done and congratulations on your well-deserved win. Big cheers- Joan


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
    Thank you, Joan. A big (happy) surprise!!
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This is such an awesome flash fiction story! You captured my attention from the beginning, and I never saw the ending coming. It's heartbreaking but so well written!

Congrats on the win! Well-deserving.


 Comment Written 22-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
    Thank you so much!
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Bill Schott
 
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There's a lot of backstory that plays out without the need of words here. The divorced husband (likely over the death and aftermath), deeply faith based and strong family instincts that cut both ways. The self-medicating that blurs reality, but never changes it. Powerful and heart-wrenching story.


 Comment Written 22-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
    Thanks so much, Bill!!
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evilynne
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Wow, that is a great short story! Congratulations - It certainly deserved the win. It is well written, very touching, and the ending is certainly a surprise. Evi


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
    Thank you, Evi. I have to be honest. I haven't seen any others in the competition and when I was notified that I won, I wondered if mine was the only entry!! hahaha! I've never won a site contest before. *smile*
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country ranch writer
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Loss of a child or any. Loved one makes people craw into a drug induced state. They can not accept their death as a final good by blaming themselves for not being a better parent


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
    I hate to admit you're probably right. We just have to blame ourselves, don't we? So sad.

    Thanks for reading!

reply by country ranch writer on 25-Jun-2018
    Hqugs
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Mark Valentine
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Having seen that this won, I had to go back and read it - don't know how I missed it the first time around. Wow! A Six +++ (alas, I gave you my last one earlier today).

This is powerful and original (As Gomer Pyle would say - Go-oolly!).

Seriously, the way you put the reader inside the mind of someone who is reliving a moment of the past, because accepting the reality is too hard is brilliant! You've got the reader wondering "Why aren't they calling the police?" and then you explain the why in a great twist ending. Of course this was the winner - one of the best I've read!


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2018
    HUZZAH!!!!

    Thank you, Mark. You make me happpeee!
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RFL
 
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The way you wove the story is masterful -- starting off with what appears to be kidnapped or runaway child through Maggie reaching out to her ex, and then to going to see the preacher but not phoning the police. I really did not think that Lea was dead until Maggie did not want to go down the path that the preacher urged. I have no recommendations for enhancement. Great read! Rona


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2018
    Yay!!!! Thank you so much!!
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kathleenspalding
 
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Congratulations on your well deserved win on this excellent story that completely works! I see nothing that needs to be corrected or changed, and I was close to tears with the church scene. Great job!


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2018
    Thank you, Kathleen. That means the world!!

reply by kathleenspalding on 22-Jun-2018
    My pleasure!
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2018
    Thank you!
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rwilliam
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I love the element of surprise that you put into your work. You get me every time! You'd think by now I"d learn to 'watch' for it but nope. It's thrilling. Like going on a roller coaster. I am reading your story with miming going in many directions but then realize I wasn't even on the 'right' road. :-)

Great story and very well done!!


 Comment Written 02-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
    Thanks so much, Bec! I've just submitted this one to a national contest, so I hope maybe they will like this one, too. Big hugs -- Love you!!
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