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They don't cry out loud


for want of being proud (audio by the author) warn-sensitive

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Joan E.
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I certainly stand with you for eradicating abuse and suffering. I admired your rhymed couplets in this commentary, along with your "sapling/buds/basket/vines" metaphors and dramatic, reinforcing picture selection. Sighs- Joan


 Comment Written 25-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
    Thank you for going back to this Joan. Hope you are having a great Sunday.
    Best wishes

reply by Joan E. on 26-Aug-2018
    Thank you for your good wishes and have a pleasant Sunday as well- Joan
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Hey RG

I'm back! Well, I hope I am...

I haven't been able to put pen to paper for a very long time now, however, I've just finished a whole chapter of prose (something I rarely do) and hope this will spur me on.

What a fine piece of writing this is RG. The content of which is, unfortunately, all too familiar these days.

I understand that you have had to deal with all manner of abuse during your life, and yet you write without aggression.

Beautifully written RG. Your rhyming and use of words almost cast a soothing hand over the issue.

Tactfully, you share with your reader the most degrading acts and the emotions of your victim. Making the whole subject, a pleasure to read whilst at the same time, reminding us of all the horrors people have to go through...

A great read and a reminder of the fact that so many suffer in silence.

Ultimately, people do patch up the pieces and stand strong in adult life and I know you to be one of them.

Thank you RG

Peace be with you, my friend

Tracey


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
    Hi, my dear friend. I am away for a while with options and life...hope all is well.
    Thank you so much.
    Hope to read from you soon.
    My best wishes.
    RG
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It is quite often a mistake to identify an author's view as being at one with a leading character. Nabokov's Humbert Humbert is besotted with Lolita and Humbert is Nabokov's fictional protagonist not not his alter ego. So I view this poem in a similar way, but at the same time warning you that despite your "disclaimer" in the note you are laying yourself open to ... shall we say challenge rather than criticism. I a world where a pediatrician can be hounded by the ignorant mob that equated the title to that of paedophile almost anything can happen.


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
    Wel, let's just say, some of us have been subjected to much more than you maybe could dream off, so , not a disclaimer, just probably the triumph hold me near, so believing that I stand against hurt of the innocents in life, and happy to be connected to that fact, for if you have followed, or read many of my other works, you will find many a trait, often written through the eyes of women, even the downtrodden...so, yes, whatever I write comes naturally, I do not think to analyse the reader's thoughts in terms of how I am seen or believed. I must say, it's easy to find me through my writings. I write sensitively as I know things like this touch many, one way or another, but I write with respect, so other people find what they want to find within. I need not be analysed for it, just read and know that more than my heart is torn out by such as written, and perhaps even more cruel, No one escapes their writing, whether humor, love comedy, horror, all have traits of saying who we are, even if in the smallest way. I remember you writing a work, rather a long time ago, can't quite remember, but it was to do with the British ..and if I remember , was it Scotland or Northern Ireland...something of the sort, and there were no hiding from your views in that respect. We are who we are. Writing Lolita, or any other work, does not mean there is indigence in, yet may well be connection to , without indulging where the connection is or stems from. We never escape our writing. I am happy to be connected, for I know what it is like to cry helplessly, until there were no tears left to cry...and I was hurt more because there were no tears left.

    Thank you, as always, for your review.
    Wishing you a great day.
    RGstar
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This is amazing. You are so talented. It flows so beautifully and there are some amazing similes and metaphors. I love the defiance: "No, they don't cry out loud... as nevermore shall your demons shroud" as much as I love the comparison:

"...each flame may not burn as bright
Just as sweet chocolate may not conceal sour tastes of dark delight"

Wonderful.

One thing: "Sing not sweet lullabies at eventide midst fireflies in bliss" -- perhaps a comma after "eventide". Just a thought because that was the only place I had to stop and sort it out in my mind. =)



 Comment Written 28-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    ESharbeen, with or without , equally depending on how reading, but your suggestion makes a lot of sense withal, and I'll be pleased to put one in. Thank you,mood suggestion.
    Thank you for the six stars. My very best wishes.
    RGstar
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Very good interpretation of an abused and abuser.

It is a story which is prevalent and tears the fabric of trust between some adults and children. It destroys the victims and only few are able to overcome the pain associated with the act.

The artwork certainly depicts the theme of the story.



 Comment Written 27-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    My best wishes to you Sandra. Thank you for visiting this.
    Wishing you a great day.
    RGstar

reply by Sandra Elizabeth Williams on 29-Jun-2018
    You are most welcome.
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Hi RG.
Your poem to me tell of the innocence of childhood invaded by power of abuse, but through this emerges a strong proud woman who will not let her childhood ordeal define who she is today, and therefore hold the power now. From the victim to the victor. Strength is in the putcome of adversity. Poetically beautifully constructed and speaks volumes .Cheers Christine


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thank you Chrissy. Good to hear from you.
    Thank you so much for the six stars.
    Hope to read from you soon.
    My best wishes.
    RG
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Hello RGstar

Hello RGstar
even without hearing your voice your words are so true of how a child in your clever words tell of why a child does not cry aloud, cause; I was one and going to post a poem of how I felt in a poem that I'm going to post.
Gert


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Can't wait to read that Gert. Post high enough so I see it. Thank you for visiting this. Many survivors out there with much to tell, and I admire if they can't. Just feel I am not able for many reasons, but strongly in support.
    My very best wishes.
    RGstar

reply by Gert sherwood on 29-Jun-2018
    Hello RGstar you are welcome.
    I already posted it the title is
    A child of Abuse
    Gert
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In my opinion, a striking and sensitive write, defining the saddest scenario of all - the injury done to a child, who is both innocent and vulnerable to the trauma exacted by adult abuse. Both rhyme and rhythm are smooth and fluid in movement, line to line and stanza to stanza - an outstanding shout for the children...


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    thank you so much Eve. Good to hear from you. Thank you for a great feedback. My very best wishes.
    RG

reply by evesayshi on 29-Jun-2018
    You are very welcome, Roy, and thank you for your best wishes - I send you the same...Eve
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I resonate with the message, child abuse should never happen in a civil community , especially among Christians. Jesus said the children can easily enter the gates of Heaven because of their purity and innocence. Very well done.


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
    Thank you so much. Good to hear from you.
    I appreciate your words here.
    Wishing you a great day.
    RG
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This is a true work of art and a very necessary poem. It touched my heart deeply. I like that you made her someone who rose above her ordeal with strength, courage and hope.


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2018



reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
    Thank you, Sasha. Always good to hear from you.
    Wishing you a great day.
    My best.
    RG
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