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Her Lover is Lost to Her At Sea


A Ditty: Every Night She Keeps Watch for Her Captain

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Anne B Francis
 
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This makes one think not just about all those lost at sea during the war but
even today - those lost in mines wives waiting praying and hoping all is not
lost. Excellent

Anne


 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
    Hi Anne... This was a write that took me away to another day as you say... Also, it was dreamy, not usually my style but I enjoyed it... yours, diana
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Cindy McIntyre
 
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The heart-wrenching reality of unrequited love! That's an emotional nightmare that seems to carry into our waking hours. I loved your connection to the Captain of the sea. A stunning poem.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    Hi Cindy... Thanks for the constellation of stars and reading my poem... yours, diana
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this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear artasylum! love lost in a skip of the heart beat. turning a new leaf is best when it loses its compassion.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    Hi Rebekka... Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
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As I read this, I was reminded of the song Brandy where a barmaid loses her love to the sea. Some things can't be competed with. A soul that longs to travel is one of them. This is well-written.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    I love that... I liked that song... now I can't get it out of my head. Thanks Thomas. yours, diana
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estory
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This had an interesting, imaginative format with those episodes of reality mingled in with the visions of the lost lover, very good contrast between the loneliness you have to deal with now, done in a very here and now style, and those ethereal visions of the lost spirit. "Nailing drapery over her reality" was an interesting image, trying to turn your back on the pain. very original. estory


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    Hey estory: Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
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This is a sad but beautiful poem. The manner in which you describing the gradual losing of hope is well done. I especially like your line: "Nailing drapery over her reality". Losing someone is hard and sometimes the drapery just doesn't want to stay nailed down.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    Hi Nancy:
    Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
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It seems her love has kept her from realizing he is dead. It took her too long to accept the facts but finally she returned to life.

Well written. I hope it did well in the contest.

Keep writing

Joan


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    Dragonpoet: It's been known to happen that we cling onto unrequited love and forget to let go. Yours, diana

reply by dragonpoet on 23-Jul-2018
    Yes, it has. Have a great week.

    Joan
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This evokes some intense emotions. I truly feel sorry for her. You can feel the longing and loneliness. Very well written. Seems to be inspired by true emotions.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    D. Joseph: Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
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Your title is the best hook and backs up the promise of some good reading. You could feel the despair dripping down. I'm not crazy about artwork accompanying poetry--too distracting. Your title and the body of the piece should be allowed front and center. You words are strong plus she looked like she was looking out the window for Fabio. I felt the the one line demarcations were redundant. Let the reader learn for themselves what's going on. Great subject matter. Write on.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    Hello sd shortt: Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
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Great job, Diana. The last stanza sums up the feeling of resigned desolation very well. So true the Captain chooses the sea over a woman every time.

Great job and best wishes to you in the contest.

Gloria


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    Unfortunately Gloria... although I can't say I blame him... yours, diana
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