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Hey Jude!


Jude gets in trouble when he turns in a Beatle project.

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I really liked this! It was very well thought out and put together. I enjoyed the simplicity of it. Also very matter of fact and to the point. Overall really well done.


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



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    Thanks
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I really like the way you incorporated many Beetle songs into this fascinating story. It flowed smoothly, almost like a poem. I could find nothing wrong with it.


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



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    Thanks fm
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I like the story because it has so many different facts to enjoy, The Beatles coming to life and helping Jude was inventive. And...I learned something about the Monarch Butterfly today...We have Milkweed growing nearby and I've seen the Monarchs all over them...Now I'm going to check to see if there's any caterpillars hanging around there. : )
Judy


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



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    Thanks Judy
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Ha, now if only it was that easy to make grades top notch. That was most creative for Jude to take a bad grade and make it better.

Very neat idea to weave the Beatles songs into the dialogue.

Ha, we all live in a green chrysalis, I knew it!

Great good fun, Jenny and now I'm off to the green chrysalis.

Gloria


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Yay...wouldn't it be fun to live in one?
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we have butterfly plants planted all over our yard our landlady loves monarch butterflies. butterflies are beautiful in so many ways.


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



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    Thank you
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Stars for you, my pen pal friend. I like how you turned the bad
situation around. He had to face fears and taught the whole school
about monarchs. We have monarchs in our gardens and plenty of
milkweeds. I even have a butterfly garden in the shape of a
butterfly. Kiwi, I'm sure the children love helping the monarchs.

The Beatles helped Jude with his project. Stay happy and enjoy life.
flylikeaneagle


 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018



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    Thank you for the exceptional rating of 6 stars....big hugs
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This is a great story -- I love how you have selected the Beatles as the song writers for allot of the lyrics in this musical piece... it is very cleverly done... I am impressed... you interjected different words from their songs, just at the right time, to continue the dialogue of Jude in his school assignment... I am also very glad that you have pointed out how endangered Monarch Butterflies are -- and what a fragile and perilous life they lead... the fact of they can freeze to death if their wings get wet is so sad -- tragic that such a beautiful, fragile, light and lovely little creature as the Monarch can be on the edge of extinction.. but I am so glad you used this opportunity to spread the joy and the news about our little winged wonders! The ending is such a witty job of meaningful word play at its finest!


 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thanks so much he he he...
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Aww, this is just so sweet. I love the way you make the John, Paul, George and Ringo from The Beatles play a part in this lttle story. It's very cleverly done. Yes, I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))


 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you Ulla
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I love this! A great story! Of course, it does have several of my favorites going for it - Ringo, John, Paul, and George, and the biggest one - the Monarch Butterfly! Than you for writing and posting this! And a belated welcome, Kiwi!


 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
    We are butterfly twins
    Thanks
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You've an interesting story here! You've used the Beatles lyrics really well. It's a cute story about how Jude finally gets a B. The conversation is quite engaging. I enjoyed reading it.


 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
    Thank you
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