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A lover's sigh


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Father Flaps
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Hi Trimp
I think a tidal wave could knock you off your feet. You might even get hurt. Hey, who's kidding who? You might drown! But isn't that what love is all about?
You start off with a terrific simile,
"Like a tidal wave"
I love the seashore!

Hugs
Kimbob


 Comment Written 29-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
    Thank you Kimbob :)
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Thus three-line poem, A Lover's Sigh, uses fifteen words to make a lover's dependable showings of affection analogous to the steady and repetitive laps of the sea tides. Nicely done.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
    Thank you, Bill. Much appreciated
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This is a nicely illustrated and worded short poem. Love can feel like a tidal wave when we are with our beloved--a nice one, though. LOL! Good luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Hiya, Marilyn

    Thank you so much for the review and comments.

    I'm none to clever at writing this lovely dovey stuff :)

    cheers you

    kind regards
    tracey

reply by BeasPeas on 25-Jul-2018
    I'm LOL!. Sometimes I can write lovey-dovey. Like you, I think others may be better at it. Marilyn

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    :)
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This is beautiful, I love the comparison of the "tidal wave" and love being a constant. The presentation is lovely, and your use of punctuation excellent and I usually do like punctuation is short pieces. This should do very well.


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you, Val

    Punctuation has never come easy to me, but I'm learning... slow but sure :)

    Thank you ever so much for your review and comments.

    I'm still waiting for your next showpiece, Val.

    kindest regards

    trimple
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This speaks how you would feel to describe his state of love assurance, he comes like a tidal wave and reassures you of love with new promise and goes back and repeats; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you :)
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-Very nice image and presentation, Trimple.
-Syllable count is good.
-I like the image in the first line.
-You use it well to develop the
main idea in your poem of how
he reassures you.
-Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you, Pam, for your review and critic.

    kind regards

    trimple

reply by Pam (respa) on 25-Jul-2018
    You are welcome, trimple.
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