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Comment by | Premier Author | | Premier Reader | | Poet Rating     Rank: 68 | Author Rating For Short Works     Rank: 40 | Author Rating For Novels      | Script Rating      | Review Stars    Rank: 81 | | |
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Wow! This is some fine writing, Lee. I really enjoyed it. And I could picture it, too, as if I was right there.
You nailed the southern slang so well, I could hear it come right out of the black woman's mouth.
The lines I enjoyed the most:
"The screen door offered a springy whine as it opened, then added a flat slap as it snapped closed. Familiar notes from the long symphony of the old woman's story. Staccato markers of a lifetime of comings and goings."
"An' I can a'ways smell sunset sure as bread in the oven."
"I got mem'ry vision. Sometimes I think I see better'n most--eyes can pick up too much clutter, addle the brain."
"At first, I thought I was bein' punished, you know? I thought I musta done some powerful evil to make the Lord sentence me to life in the dark."
Like I can see how you might've filched an extra cookie whilst you was doin' the dishes."
"I didn't--"
"Strawberry-filled. I can smell it on your sweet little fingers."
"I'm sorry, Granny."
Nicely penned, Lee! And good luck in the contest. This is sure to be a contender.
cheers,
Kimbob
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2018 |
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
Thanks so much, Kimbob. I've always loved 'porch stories'. To me, porches bring out the poetry and philosophy in everyday folks. Screen doors always punctuate porches. And I like the rhythm of Southern speech.
I'm glad you enjoyed, my friend. Peace, Lee
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Comment by | Premier Author | | Premier Reader | | Poet Rating      | Author Rating For Short Works      | Author Rating For Novels      | Review Stars   Rank: 191 | | |
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All your stories have a touch of the human genome, but this story really made me grateful again, for all I have. In spite of a life of sin and excess I still have my good health, a remaining smidgen of strength and finally, some common sense.
Your characters spring to life, personalities shaping their dialogue. I learn every time I read one of your efforts.
You should consider publishing some of your work, and reserve a copy for me!
irish
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2018 |
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
Thanks again, Irish. The thought of publishing is tempting, but I worry the business of it may sap all the pleasure out of writing. I mean, who wants to be pestered by the Nobel and Pulitzer committees all the time?
Glad to hear you're doing well, and I look forward to your next visit. Peace, Lee
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