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Jogging is Dangerous to your Life


Many girls and women have suffered through rapes.

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dragonpoet
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This story makes life itself seem dangerous all the time. If people get kidnapped both while staying home and jogging alone, then nowhere is safe. Does this mean you should never go to the store by yourself because you could get carjacked. You have to learn to live a happy life
despite how dangerous the world is.
It is true these bad things happpen but you should not center your life on doing nothing alone.
It should be these snatch and grabs 'are"
Keep writing
Joan


 Comment Written 19-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
    Thanks for excellent stars and review. Stay Safe Sanitize. Help me fix my burst pipes and flooded home due to Texas ice snow storms and 0 zero degree weather total electricity black out 7 days no lights no heat no tv no phone no water no cab service snowed in. Some people froze to death at home; families died in car running to keep warm with Windows up and garage doors down carbon monoxide poisoning an odorless colorless tasteless gas. Support your struggling writer by checking out books I wrote at: libertyjusticebooks.com 😀 In Texas still children women men missing this week.

reply by dragonpoet on 14-Mar-2021
    My pleasure.
    dp
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Exceptional
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Mollie was found three weeks later.
She was murdered by a a Mexican.
Two young boys were knifed to death in my home towm of Manahawkin New Jersey about 20 years ago.
It was their Mexican House Keeper.
She tried to call 9-11 but he grabbed her and forced her into the car but got caught a little later.
Well written.
Dr Ricky 1024
Later today


 Comment Written 26-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
    Thanks Dr. Ricky excellent stars. Did you call people i wrote you about regarding your home? You can file with CFPB Consumer Finance Prrotection Bureau and Dept Mortgage and Savingd. Liberty justice
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I just saw on Fox new that Mollie's body was found. I hope they find out who did this. She was so young and beautiful. You seem to have a real heart for young women and their vulnerability in this world. It's wonderful that you care. Thank you for sharing this in your writing.
All my best,
Sally


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much Sally for lovely stars. Welcome aboard.
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Not sure nif this is still in a contest. If it is I wish you well. You need to fix some of the spags. Can tell you are defintiely worked up in all this, and justifiably so. Now some spags for ya. she is the young pretty gir(l)

I don't remember[,] if she had children,

PILLING OUT MY P(ENT)[INNED] UP EMOTIONS,

ME[,] WELL!!


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
    No, I lost this contest, also, because I did not have enough supporters to support me, again. Thanks for stars. liberty justice
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With everything going on in the world today, your story was very moving, reminding us all to be careful as there are dangers around us, any time, anywhere, keep eye contact and always be prepared even in daylight hours and public places. Good luck in the contest. RJ


 Comment Written 09-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
    Thanks RJ great comments stars.
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You are absolutely right. There are dangers out there for women, children, and young men as well. It is essential that someone like you tells them those facts. You present a lot of sobering information and facts to bolster your claims about what can happen. You have a nice, informal writing style, but a few things I might note. I'd just use "women" in the first paragraph. Omit girls. Also, condense a bit so you're not repeating "might be." Third paragraph, condense to "young, pretty Iowa college student." "Snatch and grabs like this ARE a common occurrence." You can probably find other places where you can eliminate unnecessary words. I think you can do some editing and still keep your conversational style. Best of luck. judi


 Comment Written 08-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
    Thanks Judi for stars and comments.

reply by judiverse on 13-Aug-2018
    You're so welcome. Quite a serious warning in this. judi
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Hi Liberty. This is a strong piece. The dangers women and children face if alone and in remote areas is frightening. I wish you much luck in the contest.

One suggestion: "but she drug (dragged) herself to the safety of her home that was ONLY a few houses away!"
Marilyn


 Comment Written 07-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much BeasPeas lovely stars.
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I have been sexually assaulted. I've had a stalker. But I will still go for walks. I can't let them have that control. I recently had a creep following me a couple times. I called the police station and they told me what to do if I saw him again. I haven't seen him again on my walks, but I'm also not going to stop walking because of him. I will do what they told me to do next time if he follows me. I won't stop living my life because they are out there, somewhere. Every time I go to work, go grocery shopping, get gas, pay bills, etc., there is always that chance I guess. But you can't let it cripple you. I think we need to be self aware of what is around us. I want to be the first person to know that creep is following me. I want to know what is going on. We need to pay attention and know how to deal with a situation when we have to. Instead of telling us to stay inside and lock our doors, why not teach each other how to self defend.


 Comment Written 07-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
    I think it is legal in some states to carry knives, mace and pepper spray. Self-defense classes are good.
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Thank you, Liberty for this amazing essay. I am sure your stats are correct, but it's also true thst women cannot bury their heads in the sand everyday and give up their lives because of some idiot running loose.

Your information is most likely accurate and i would not question them.

Bless you, my friend. Bob


 Comment Written 07-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
    Hi Bob! Thanks lovely stars. There are thousands of idiots running wild. Where is poor MOLLIE?

reply by Mastery on 07-Aug-2018
    I agree. Where is she? Rough world out there. sigh. Bbob

reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
    Mollie is still missing.
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I knew the situation was bad, but your contest entry expresses exactly how horrible it is. Thank you for sharing with us. I wish you luck with the contest.


 Comment Written 07-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
    Thanks Barb lovely stars.
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