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Another Lost Youth


Drugs, depression, death

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An excellent poem, Jay, about a timely topic. Your poem tells it like it is and your last line sums it up perfectly. Unless the addict wants to help himself, there is nothing we can do. Marilyn


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018


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Excellent Poem! The poem is heart felt, sad and thought provoking.
The reader ponder on the words of this poem and found the writer
stated all that could be done. As an addiction counselor I agree with
the author's notes. Thank you for a well written and informative
poem.


 Comment Written 11-Aug-2018


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Many of us who, like yourself knew life before the onset of the drugged generation, feel as you clearly do in this well-written English style sonnet. This desire for self destruction seems to stem from a mistaken idea that oncan simply enjoy oneself or, as they put it 'have fun'.

Some years ago one of them wrote of another, a friend then recently deceased, 'all he wanted to do was to have fun.'

If only these youngsters and not so youngsters would realise that 'fun' results from other goals having been achieved, a job well done, a game well played or whatever. To set out simply to have fun is a short cut to the drug induced hell that so often leads to suicide.


 Comment Written 11-Aug-2018


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It is indeed friend. My wife found a young 17 year old boy hanging from the monkey bars at a local kids play ground two winters ago, while she was out for an early morning run. She was in shock and deeply distressed for a very long time afterwards.


 Comment Written 11-Aug-2018


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Hi Jaybird1,

This is a poignant and sad sonnet about the youth. The feelings you have penned can struck chords that we have felt before. The couplet of it is graceful. Well done!

Peace be with you,

Urial



 Comment Written 11-Aug-2018


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Jaybird: great awareness of youth and problems they have.
Drugs, depression, lonliness and suicide are world's ways
of darkness. I try to help women with pain have fun times.
We all need friends. People have to want to get better.
flylikeaneagle - nancy


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So very sad, and tragically true...there is often NOTHING that can be done, until the addict wants to quit. I live near WVA...where thousands have died from heroin...a waste, a shame. Beautiful poem,
blessings....


 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018


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A sad but truthful commentary on the plague of drugs, depression and suicide killing our young ones today. It is as difficult for us to watch as it is for the ones going through it. Thank you for shining a light on this problem in such an eloquent way.


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I wish I had a six star rating to give you. You deserve it for this poem. So raw and real. Ive been in this same position and I know the pain. Thanks for putting into words what so many people feel.


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Hi Jaybird, a sombre write on a relevant subject. Your words speak real truths. Written in sonnet form, though not in iambic pentameter, it is well written with good abab rhyme maintained throughout. You tackled the subject sympathetically and the sadness came through. Well done and warm regards Dorothy x


 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018


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