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A father/son dialogue.

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LIJ Red
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One old saw seems true, if you can cook that freshwater fish in the boat, it's better.
Seems like the dad has one way to deal with a bad situation. Excellent post. The note about frozen pale smelly substances is most apt.


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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Red. I don't care what anybody says, frozen fish sticks are God's wrath upon mankind. Peace, Lee
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I like this story very much. Really nice to see a dad who wants to connect with his kids. Lots of humor as well. I didn't see any errors. Really well done. Rox


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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Rox. I really related to the struggling dad. All stories need a hero. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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This is outstanding. Humor and a tutorial of parenting all rolled into one. My kids took your role after my wife died. My artificial lens replaced the cloudy ones. The Optometrist said, I have twenty-twenty vision. That's still not strong enough to see the hairs to split them as you did the apostrophes. Well done.


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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much, Henry. Love and loss is always a tough topic to tackle. I appreciate your kind comments. Peace, Lee
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You never fail to amaze me Lee. our stories are always so
true to life and the dialogue so unique and catchy. Your work is always holds so much imagery I feel like I am there. This is not fluff. I do enjoy your work. Well done.
Nancy :)


 Comment Written 13-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much, Nancy. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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A well-written piece on grieving. The dad is thoughtful and reminds me of "Father Knows Best" show from the 60's. I'm surprised that Tim is well read enough at 13 to recognize the reference to Moby Dick. But that may be another metaphor for mopy dick...
Anyways, it is well written and a good read.


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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Beck. Yes, an updated rendition of Father Knows Best. 'Call me Ishmael' is a pretty popular quote, even from cartoons and comic books. At thirteen, I hadn't read Melville, but I knew who Ahab and Ismael were. Mopy Dick--I like that.
    Glad you enjoyed. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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If you need two apostrophes for fishin''s what about movin' up to the fo''c's'l'. Sometimes correct is pedantic. Forecastle is probably better abbreviated as fo'c's'l and even that looks od.

The mildly amusing banter between father and son is in reality an interesting lesson in coping with bereavement which must be very hard to do with a young family. I think you handled this theme very well indeed. You were a brave writer, in my opinion, to even try.


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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
    'Fishin''s' posed a dilemma. If I punctuated it incorrectly, I'd get gigged. If I punctuated it correctly, but didn't explain, I'd get gigged. I went with correct, if pedantic. At least correct can be defensed.

    Thank you, Jim. Yes, bereavement is a tricky subject. I just tried to put a quirky spin on it. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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You did a terrific story of showing how the father determined to get Tim and so9ister Rachel out of grieving for their mother. The excellence here is, as always, your keen insight in characters and their traits, their "tell" so to speak, and how to make the reader get all that.

Excellence all round, Lee.


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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much, apky. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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I lost my father on July, '49 and my mother in '72. That was when I learned the value of Letter Writing. I wrote each a letter, and read it daily for a few weeks. Then I burned them and said my goodbye's. I have lost ten of my siblings over the years, but have never felt the need to write any of them a letter. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.


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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Charlie. The grieving process is such an individual thing. Your idea of writing letters sounds very therapeutic. I'm guessing a lot of people could benefit from that idea. Thank you again. Peace, Lee

reply by c_lucas on 15-Aug-2018
    You're welcome, Lee.
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I particularly like your stories of young boys. You had to restrain your normal flippancy just a little so the father could be tender. His way of talking is still fun though. Both characters were engaging. This is a poignant story. One of your best.


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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Debbie. Yes, I still have 'boy' memories. But I like writing beleaguered fathers, too. This one is right up my wheelhouse. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Dad had the right idea to get his children to move on by using his head to get his point across. I think this is right on and you did good work here. Keep up the good work.


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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much, crw. Parents seem to get a bad rap these days. I tried to show the other side. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by country ranch writer on 17-Aug-2018
    smiles
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