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Under the Canopy


A night at the Fair with a mighty steed...

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Comment by
Lady Jane
 
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The Magnificent Steed: - I'd italicize this just for effect - just a suggestion/not required :)

Fun minute poem you've crafter here, art asylum. I penned an entire children's series in Minute Poetry, titled, Koala Bing...this style is not easy to write and do so fluidly, great job. Syllabic structure is correct, theme is good, and the presentation is well done. Nice job, keep writing.
Janelle


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    Hello JaCherie... I loved this format the first one I have penned... so cool that you wrote a book in this form. It was addictive I wanted to keep writing and bring people through the lights and sounds of the whole fair... thanks so much for reviewing... yours, di
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This is marvelous. I think kids would love it...felt like a merrygo round ride
Well penned. I must say the syllable constraints of some of these forms is bewildering
Well penned again...I like the magnificent steed
God bless


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    Hello kiwijenny... I agree the constraints are daunting... yours, diana
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Jmf4119
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A lovely minute poem.
Last week, we visited some friends in PA and went to the county fair. It was fun to ride the merry-go-round reminisce about childhood memories. Delightful piece.

Blessings
Janet


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much Jmf... I'm very grateful and humbled by you vote of confidence... I haven't be to a fair in a very long time... when I started this poem I could here the calliope. It was fun to move in there for a moment. Thanks, Diana
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I enjoyed your Magnificent Steed and his endless rides around the calliope. I always felt that the merry-go-round is a ride of serenity and excitement at the same time.


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
    It is peaceful and bring so much joy to so many... Thanks Beck... yours, diana
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A. Willow Bends
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I always enjoy reading your work. You have a definite flair for the dramatic! What is more fun than this? Beautiful job and you went into such detail to describe the Minute formatting. Forget that. Your work stands alone. It is fantastic! Great pic to match. Your poems explain themselves. Sorry I am out of sixes.
Good Luck!!!
Wendy


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
    Thanks so very much for your wonderful and thoughtful comments I'm am I appreciate you reading. yours, diana
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I don't like counting syllables and following rules, if I read it and it feels good it is good. this one makes me feel really good, nuff said. I like it, Diana............meeshu


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
    Hey meeshu... I don't like counting syllables either... thanks for reading. yours, diana
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'Under the Canopy", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
    Hey duchess... thanks for stopping by to read. yours, diana
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I think this will be rejected by the review committee. It took me a minute and three seconds to read it. That was probably because it was so good I read it twice. If they read it once, it may win.


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
    I think it will too... however... I still like the poem... it was fun to write! Yours, diana
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Very well done minute poem for the contest. I could hear the children's laughter as I read. I liked the presentation which of course perfectly reflected your work. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
    Hey Sandy... I'm very grateful for your stellar review. yours, dana
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I thought it was a great children's poem; you really captured that sense of the carousel horses going up and down with the rhythm of the language and the syllables in your stanzas. I liked the images too; the magical transformation that the horses work on the kids; turning them into knights, ladies, on these mythical rides between castles and rainbows. I liked the contrasts between the white horses and the black manes, the lights reflecting in the mirrors. Its been many a year since I've read a carousel, but your poem took me back there. estory


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much estory for your vote of confidence... I'm very grateful... I haven't ridden a carousel in I don't remember when... thanks for the stellar review. yours, diana
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