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I like your four-line poem, especially your last sentence. It is meaningful and well-written. Your artwork choice brings your message to life. Best wishes!


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Thank you for reviewing.
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Joan E.
 
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You certainly capture the sense of aging in this tiny, Four Line Poem. Your selection of the nostalgic, sepia photograph was perfect. Best wishes in the competition- Joan


 Comment Written 23-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
    Thsnks,Joan. Loved that artwork. .
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rama devi
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Hi, dear friend. I like this. The opening is very cliche (time passing me by) and made me wonder where you were heading, and then the closing line packs a punch of a AHA that made me pause and ponder. Well done! The presentaiton is great. I like the flow of the phrasing, especially the closing line. Bravo.

Love,
rd


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
    Thanks, rd.

reply by rama devi on 21-Aug-2018
    :-))
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is passing me by

When I was young, I wanted to be older. I didn't know it would be like this. A friend was complaining about not feeling well. I said after I turned fifty, I didn't expect to feel good.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
    Hey, i"ll take fifty, any day. Thanks for reviewing.
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Jannypan (Jan)
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You did a good job, Dallas, with your 4 line contest entry. The picture is perfect--fits the nostalgia theme nicely. I am confused with the word youth in the last line. Time is rewinding back to your youth. So where you are now is the present at a certain age. If I'm wrong, then ignore this. But do you mean obscuring my sight . . . . [maybe or mimd?]

Best wishes. Jan


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
    What I mean is, time is eating up my youth causing me to reflect back to the past. Sorry so confusing.
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The photograph of these children is priceless. They are young yet dressed as mature adults which absolutely highlights the theme of your sweet and wonderful poem.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018



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    Thank you.
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