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angel123

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I like your four-line poem, especially your last sentence. It is meaningful and well-written. Your artwork choice brings your message to life. Best wishes!

Comment Written 28-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018

Thank you for reviewing.

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Joan E.

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You certainly capture the sense of aging in this tiny, Four Line Poem. Your selection of the nostalgic, sepia photograph was perfect. Best wishes in the competition- Joan

Comment Written 23-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018

Thsnks,Joan. Loved that artwork. .

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rama devi

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Hi, dear friend. I like this. The opening is very cliche (time passing me by) and made me wonder where you were heading, and then the closing line packs a punch of a AHA that made me pause and ponder. Well done! The presentaiton is great. I like the flow of the phrasing, especially the closing line. Bravo.

Love,
rd

Comment Written 21-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018

Thanks, rd.

reply by rama devi on 21-Aug-2018

:-))

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Thomas Bowling

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is passing me by

When I was young, I wanted to be older. I didn't know it would be like this. A friend was complaining about not feeling well. I said after I turned fifty, I didn't expect to feel good.

Comment Written 21-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018

Hey, i"ll take fifty, any day. Thanks for reviewing.

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Jannypan (Jan)

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You did a good job, Dallas, with your 4 line contest entry. The picture is perfect--fits the nostalgia theme nicely. I am confused with the word youth in the last line. Time is rewinding back to your youth. So where you are now is the present at a certain age. If I'm wrong, then ignore this. But do you mean obscuring my sight . . . . [maybe or mimd?]

Best wishes. Jan

Comment Written 21-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018

What I mean is, time is eating up my youth causing me to reflect back to the past. Sorry so confusing.

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LeftHandedScribe

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The photograph of these children is priceless. They are young yet dressed as mature adults which absolutely highlights the theme of your sweet and wonderful poem.

Comment Written 21-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018

Thank you.

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