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Some thoughts on what I've eaten.

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Yes, yes, I loved it. I laughed, I cried, I related but most of all, I totally enjoyed this essay.

The writing was seamless, and flowed. I never felt bogged down, but urged to read on.
thanks
[If I don't win, I hope you do]


 Comment Written 04-Sep-2018


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I love the humor in this. I also had a mother who couldn't cook. School lunches were heaven to me! I learned how after I left home. I became a very good cook and taught all of my children (boys and girls alike) to cook. There was no way a kid of mine was going to grow up eating like I did.
Very well written!
Best of luck in the contest ???


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Wow! I so totally enjoyed reading this Mark Twain-esque story of being raised in a boiling family. I laughed all the way through. The revelation of taste at the Chinese restaurant was the best dessert.


 Comment Written 29-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Bill. I'm glad you enjoyed. Mark Twain-esque means a lot to me. Peace, Lee
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Excellent as always, Lee. Yet an old Miracle Whip TV ad comes to mind. The airline lunch choice of a classic sub or chicken that had been, you know, boiled....my mom's theory was fry it in lard, and she was reputed to be a fine cook...


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Thanks, Red. I'll take fried in lard over boiled in water 'til may last day--even if it did come sooner. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Hi, Lee,

I don't think I could handle a diet of boiled food. Sounds like a bad dream.

However, you wrote this with your usual style of homespun charm, and I was captivated from start to finish.

Good luck in the contest,

~patty~


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Patty. Funny what you'll eat when you're unaware of other options. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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This is delicious, Lee. What more can I say?

At eight-years-old, empathy remained an alien concept. ~ I think you don't need the hyphens here, unless you deliberately want them in.

My no-no was "porridge"; even the name sounds like the damn thing looked...


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Thank you, apky. Porridge sounds dreadful. Almost as bad as gruel. I've evolved into a different kind of eater. I like crunch and spice. Germy-lurkers don't phase me. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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The voice of this one reminds me of Jean Shepherd's A Christmas Story - an adult's retrospective take on the absurdities of his childhood.

There are so many humorous observations from that perspective - "Mom's commands were literal, her asides rhetorical" . There are also "Christmas Story-sequel"'takes on the legendary stature that childhood events can take on: the "Fried Chicken Disaster of 1962"

Then, of course, there are your typical humorous lines - once burnt, twice shy - your description of the psychedelic colors.

Fantastic!


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Mark. Jean Shepherd's work has influenced and informed a lot of my stories. I think he knew the secret--writing is fun. And, if you're a little bit clever, you can inject a little insight into the amusement.
    The only thing better than enjoying my own writing is enjoying the writings of others. Thank you, Mark.

    Peace, Lee
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How do you do it? I try to save my six-star ratings for other writers, but I can't do it. Your work is so delightful to me. Even your photo makes me laugh.
I've got a little in your mother in me, which made the story even funnier. I've also almost burned our house done while trying to fry chicken. I'm a good cook, but I wash and wash and wash. Everything from my hands, to dishes, to countertops. Cooking is enormously stressful.
I should be talking about what I like in your story, but to me, it is everything. Every line is humorous and perfectly written. Little things like "gastronomic slow-swimmers," and "myriad pots a-boil" show how you never miss a chance to express yourself creatively.
Do you still live in Connecticut? This Alabama girl is getting very familiar with the state. My son just moved to Stamford and commutes to Manhattan. I've already been there a few times, but I intend to spend much more time there visiting grandchildren.


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much, Debbie. We all have food stories. That's why I chose this prompt. It's easy to be funny when we all have similar experiences. A few decades of writing TV and print ads have afforded me a pretty good vocabulary. Sometimes the right word turns an ordinary sentence into something funny.

    Yes, I still live in Connecticut. Just outside of Hartford. Stamford is a great place, but it's more New York than Connecticut.
    Half the state loves the New York Yankees, the other half adores the Boston Red Sox. I live north of the line of demarcation.

    If you get up here in the autumn, get somebody to drive you a bit north. Great leaf-peeping.

    Thanks again, Debbie. I'm so glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee


reply by Debbie Pope on 27-Aug-2018
    I intend to explore all of Connecticut. Preston is getting married there next summer. His house is right on Long Island Sound. We always visit the Mohegan Sun when we come. I am really falling in love with the state.
    I'd love to know what you worked on when you wrote for tv. They need writers like you now.
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What shall we call this? A pastiche of food-related yarns, one-liners and hyperbole? Anyway, there are plenty of chuckles here, mostly at Mom's expense, but then if Kathy died in '25, I guess Mom's well gone by now as well, although her fastidiousness about germy-lurkers may have elevated her life expectancy somewhat!

Steve


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Steve. Yes, I turned this one into a mélange. It was fun to abandon structure and linear storytelling--even if it did come out linear. I changed '25 to '05.
    I'm sure Mom's germy-lurker phobia extended her life. Me? I chew gum I find under theater seats. Not quite. But I'm not fastidious. Thanks again, Steve. Peace, Lee
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What your story boils down to is fun and is capable of snagging the top honor in the contest! I love the term "Germy-lurkers" and the voice of your character's boyhood rings loud as that fire engine.
Good luck!


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2018



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
    Thank you, Beck. I hope all my writing boils down to fun. I'll leave the serious stuff to those who can't laugh at themselves. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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