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Tongue, Nebraska - Part 1 of 3


A story of manners, circa 1880

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Hi Lee, great beginning to a longer story. So it's the same old tale of a young girl being seduced and made believe the seducer wants her. Only problem is that she's also pregnant. There's much more to this than meets the eye. I'm waiting for what's next. You're a master of character developing.
A flurry of clomps and thumps emanated from kitchen. = ... from the kitchen.
Wonderful writing. kind regards. Ulla:))


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Just great reading, Lee. I felt I was watching an old western movie. Lots of vivid images and terrific dialogue, which is your strong suit. I look forward to the rest of the story. Well done!


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I love this line:
The man, aged somewhere between old and biblical

sobriquet - did you clear this with Linochkova or whatever her name is?

I get the impression this is to be continued. I want to find out what happens.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
    Thank you, Thomas. Yes, I posted this as Pt 1 of 3. It shall continue. Glad you're curious. Any particular reason lyenochka should be consulted about my use of 'sobriquet'? Now, I'm curious. Thanks again, Thomas. Peace, Lee
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I have to review this as one whose only experience of the USA has been celluloid or, perhaps since its 2018, digital. Never the less this first episode lived. I could see the locations and feel the weather. I could come to grips with the folk here met with and I desperately want to read part 2. Brilliant.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018


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I think ole C.B. is in for a heap of trouble.
It sounds like Maelene is taking the young
Miss Brenda Wilshire late of Philadelphia
and Saint Louis under her wing. It sounds as
though Brenda has an unlikely champion in her
corner who will help her out of her predicament,
or at least ease the pain of it. LOL Well done.
Great characters. :) Nancy

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Uh-oh! Sounds like there's a cummupence in the near future. Wonder how Miss Brenda is going to date in this arrangement.

Great hook, Lee, and characters to match. :) Nancy


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018


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Sounds like she is up the creek with out a paddle in in for a hard roe to hoe with the likes of CB. He will be fit to be tied to learn he is going to be a father.


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Such a wonderfully laid out tale, Lee! :) Have to say, though, can't decide if Maelene or Jessup rank as my favorite -- both have such a depth of personality already from just this first write! :) :) Yeah, so I feel a little sorry for Brenda and her naivete, but Maelene and Jessup? They are a story in themselves!

Thank you for introducing the world of Tongue to all of us (okay, that sounded really provocative -- honestly not meant to be! lol) and I look forward to part 2! :) ;) Yvette :)


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Wow, what a rich story! Depth of character, beautiful scenery, gorgeous use of English, I love it! It's incredibly well written and the only note I'd have is that it does not pass the bechdel test-- but this is only chapter 1 so we will have to see what happens in the next two installments

Thank you for sharing your work, as always


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
    Thanks so much, Maltiti Stavros. Your kind words are quite encouraging. But I'm unfamiliar with the 'bechdel test'. Can you inform me? Again, thanks so much for the stellar review. Peace, Lee

reply by Maltiti Stavros on 02-Sep-2018
    The Bechdel test, named after Allison Bechdel, is a flawed but useful test to see how a story is treating women. The test reads as follows: Throughout the narrative do two women, both with names, speak to each other about something other than a man?

    I love your work, so I can't wait to see where your story goes, thanks for taking the time to reply

reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
    Thanks for the info. It appears I need to broaden my women's horizons. I don't suppose discussing a china pattern would suffice? An interesting barometer. Thank you again. Peace, Lee
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