Hi Diana. Really liked this. We had a bird like this when I was very young. You've captured the essence of his behavior (from what I remember). The "memories of ancestors.." and the "fleeting sense memory..." lines gives the reader a sense of the passage prehuman years. My favorite line is; ...his human's over there. Excellent. Hope life is treating you well and you're enjoying the transition to autumn. Hugh
Ol Redbeak is quite a poem, bird and word
I wonder if birds have some innate instinct to follow
their wild friends?
You've written a wonderful, inventive poem with solid imagery
Good thing his neck isn't red or he'd be called Ol Redneck
1. a study or observation of the bird - Check
2. a personification of the bird - Check.
3. Any style of rhyme... fun/serious - Check
Yes, you've checked all the boxes with this brilliantly written rhyming poem about a very special bird - 'Ol Redbeak. This is a great and endearing poem with genuine heartfelt sentiment and humor describing a dear friend.
"Fancy Feathered Tail", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
So cleverly crafted! I love the "poem within the poem," and I learned about Indian Ringneck Parakeets as well! What an interesting and creative poetic presentation. I've never owned an "inside" bird, but your poem prompted me to think of what they must think as "birds of a feather" head south...
Love the concept of the poem within a poem. I detected that before reading your notes. I've not seen this before, it's original and clever.
The notes were most informative, I think I now want an Indian Ringneck Parakeet. Do you know if the are available in Australia? Could I teach him this poem? I'd love to hear it every time I ventured into my garden.
This was not a difficult write, neither should it be. The charm and its simplicity is the driving force of this write.
Imagery in abundance, no attempts at trying to manipulate with excessive adjectives and nouns.
The charm is extensive.
A little bit different. I like that.
Good to read from you. One of my favourite authors.
Six for sure.
It's a nice poem but I find it a bit sad whether intended or not.? I used to have tropical birds they were a joy to have but very messy! The bigger the bird the bigger the mess. I always felt guilty for caging them. While clipping their wings prevents them from flying away it also makes them easy prey.
The poem brings back good and missed feelings.
You are so clever. A poem with in a poem. I'd have never thought of that. What a beautiful bird. Had a parakeet once. He was insane. He dripped like a facet, the sound he made. Drove us nuts. He never became tame. Had to give him back to the breeder. But he was very cute. Very well done my dear. Hope you do well in the contest. Rox