Two for the price of one! Can't be bad!! lol. The Parakeets are a lovely bird, and I would think an ideal 'pet' for the elderly, especially the lonely ones. They could have quite a chat with these birds. I loved the poem, its a lovely one for the contest. Good luck! :) Sandra xxx
this is not excellent entry in this contest. An unusual subject for entry, but it fits well. The abab rhyming works sweetly, and refrain line in between verses gives flight, they appear as bridges to the standard, well dine, an excellent entry, good luck, blessings, Roy
I enjoyed the smooth flow of the rhyming words and how they sound so fluid. The author was able to capture the imagination of the readers effectively and the picture enhanced the message intended by the author.
Yes a really interesting and unusual poem within a poem. I've never seen that before, though I'm a writer not a Professor of Poetic Styles - perhaps it's a named style and I'm unaware?At first the single inserted lines are very confusing, but I eventually worked it out.
I particularly like the way you've used "fleeting sense" in this case as a combined adjectival pair. Unusual and something I'd do as well. I also really like the fact you have comprehensive Writers Notes, which is something I do religiously, so people can find the inspiration behind or the explanation of a poem with some depth.
Overall a fine piece and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
I enjoyed reading this poem about the parakeet that may ponder the freedom of other birds but enjoys his present circumstances and is happy to stay put.
Wonderful rhyming and meter.
I like the added poetic lines forming the second poem.
Very nice rhyming, and the picture is beautiful. This is a work of poetry that both makes me sad, and wonder whether animals do, indeed, have some ancient sense of the past. I really liked it! Please keep writing and sharing.