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Fancy Feathered Tale


'Ol Redbeak is happy right where he is...

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BeasPeas
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This is a beautifully composed poem, illustrated well. The bird is gorgeous and even though this one is happy to be warm and in a gilded cage, I can't help but worry that they are better off flying free. At one point I had two parrots. I realized in having them in captivity that it was horrible for them despite a doting family. But that has nothing to do with your well-written piece. Great word choices, pace, and rhyme. I do like your poem within a poem. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
    I completely hear you... birds are meant to be free... I'm so happy that your guys had a perfect ending. I have a friend who had a parrot with a very long life span. He didn't like Bonnie and would snap at her fingers when she opened his cage... she had to re-home him.

reply by BeasPeas on 20-Sep-2018
    I like your term, "re-home." Once an animal enters my home (through rescue) I don't want it to have to go through the trauma again by switching homes. But like your friend, Bonnie, I did have to re-home the two parrots. They had a much better live with the gentleman who knew how to handle them. They immediately took to him. I've stuck to dog and cat rescue since then. Marilyn

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
    Exotic pets are way past my pay grade... They must remain for those who know how to treat them in a way they deserve to be treated, Glad they were glad... !

reply by BeasPeas on 20-Sep-2018
    My husband, knowing I am an animal lover, bought them for me for Christmas. Cost a fortune. After many years of trying everything to "make the birds happy," even building a floor to ceiling aviary, we decided it was best to try to find another home for them. At that point I would have given the guy the birds, but he offered a small amount and we took it knowing everyone would be happier--us, the birds, and the guy who bought them. No more birds for me. I DO believe they should be left in their native habitat. They would be happier having their freedom. Marilyn
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I love this. 'Ol Redbeak is not about to leave that gilded warm cage, ha ha. I also like 'the poem within a poem'...is that a new form? It's wonderful. A great entry!!
Blessings...


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018


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Oh My Goodness, so cute, this is such a wonderful poem you've penned for the contest, mystery writer. I love this line:
"Icy breezes spark memories of ancestors long ago"
You've made this little birdie sound like majestic royalty. lol, I loved it from beginning to end. An awesome job, with a great picture to pair with it. Lot's of luck in the contest, this will surely do well. ~Kerry


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
    Hi Kerry... thanks so much for your glowing 6 star review... Grateful. Your comments are thoughtful and fun. thanks.

reply by Kerry Robinson on 20-Sep-2018
    It was my pleasure:))
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I love your parakeet poem! He is beautiful... I have never had a parakeet, but I hear they are little 'chatter-boxes'-- I think my favorite lines were "...Fleeting sense memory reverts back to tame.
The fireplace is glowing and his human's here.
Her sweet soft voice coos his perfect name;
his gilded cage rests in warm, cozy air..." I also loved how you brought in the 'ancestors' and reflected momentarily on that harsh reality and the present comforts of a loving, and warm home...


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
    Hi Air Spirit... your review is so much appreciated. Very thorough and thoughtful review.
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Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading this rhyming poem you have entered for the Rhyming Poem contest. I was wondering how you were going to work "gilded cage" in there, and now my curiosity is satisfied. Of course, the picture you have chosen for your illustration is very colorful and fits the poem perfectly. I like how you have included the informational text in the notes section. Good luck with your contest entry!


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018


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I guess when all's said and done, these pet birds don't know any different since they've been bred in captivity. For a fleeting moment Ol' Redbeak had a primal feeling of what other birds experience, but settled for his warm, loving home.


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018


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Well done. You did a great job describing "Ol Redbeak" I felt like I almost knew him personally. The picture was a great choice. Good luck with the contest. ;)


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018


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I'm a huge fan of birds and of great rhyming poems, and here we have both. Excellent words and picture make for a winning combination. Birds are very intelligent , most people don't know that. My husband used to have a robin that fell from a nest and raised it up to adult bird hood . They eventually released it but it came back there to see them time and again. One day it flew away and didn't return...it broke my husbands heart. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
    Hey Boogienights... I love that your robin did claim his independence and like your say though the heart breaks when he doesn't return... an open book to the story and the ending is never known. Such a lovely story... that would make a good entry for this contest.
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A truly wonderful poem for this particular contest. It is beautifully written and flows quite well. I really like the picture you chose to go with it. It reminds me of my grandma's budgie Blue. Wishing you the best in the contest.


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018


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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-An interesting style and poem
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-Color imagery also adds to the poem.
-You paint a vivid word picture of 'Ol Redbeak.
-A good concluding verse that
creates a peaceful setting.
-Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018


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