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Too busy, dear Sister

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dragonpoet
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Congrats on placing second in the contest. It was well deserved,

This free verse poems tells of how families break down because some just doesn't find the time to communicate. This person is a workaholic. At least she makes time for her kids' homework.

Keep writing

Joan


 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 13-Oct-2018
    Joan,

    You always grasps the essence of my messages, which I am most appreciative. Thank you for the review and congratulatory message. You are dear to me, my friend :)

reply by dragonpoet on 14-Oct-2018
    You are most kindly welcome. Have a good day.

    Joan
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HELLO POETIC FRIEND: I like your posting here. Why? Many years ago I heard a saying that goes like this: "You never miss your water...until your well runs dry." Now that that I've viewed your posting here...that has brand new meaning. You love your sister...and your sister loves you. That is how it is supposed to be. "Let the loved by the loved tell them so." The three words. "I LOVE YOU," are as old as water. And it takes about three seconds to say them. God bless you and yours, poetic friend. "I love you." Cordially: rhonnie69.


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 03-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your review and commentary, Rhonnie69. I agree with your sentiments. God bless you, too. Have a blessed week.
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I absolutely LOVE your message... It is such an important message: don't delay doing what your heart knows is best... your poem painfully illustrates how easy it is to become meshed with life, and get caught up in the 'hustle and bustle' of life's demands, until we sometimes come to realize that we have neglected or forgotten some of those who are the most important to us... like little flowers, each of us have a spirit that needs to be nurtured, and to nurture... when we don't take time for our friends/family, we can be so easily robbed... they can be taken from us in a heartbeat... so this is a POWERFUL reminder to not delay, stop the crazy hectic schedule, long enough to embrace someone you love or to help someone along the way...


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
    Air Spirit,

    Thank you for your enthusiastic review and input. You interpreted this poem as exactly as intended. In the majority of my poems, I attempt to send messages that could be applied into our everyday living. Sometimes I succeed. Based upon your review, I think that I succeeded with this poem.
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Very good poem. I'm glad she finally decided to call her sister. I too have many obligations but find myself texting a number of people till I can get to the actual call. Very good picture to match the poem. Great job altogether. Very well done!


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
    Thank you, Chrissy. I appreciate your review and time. Have a wonderful week. :)
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This is so well written and so right on! I'll bet a lot of folks will relate to this one. You say so well what is happening to our families, as we grow up and away from each other. I love the return to the phrase about promising to call tomorrow. I'm glad the ending, to this tribute to sisterhood, is that she finally makes the call. The Troubles you define are happening to so many of us and our siblings. I can relate to this one. Sadly, I no longer have any contact with either of my sisters and only see my brother once in a while, because he lives in the town next to mine. Since our parents died, we have drifted apart. It seems that we only stayed together for my Mom. Once she died, a few years back, we appear to have no need for each other. I used to be very close to my younger sister. We would call each other at least once a week--talk for hours on the phone. We had a fight and then a misunderstanding which has driven us far apart from each other. Now, we don't even acknowledge the other exists. So sad, I know. If you are close to your sister or brother, cherish the time you spend together. Whether it be online, on the phone, or even better, in person. Thank you for stirring up these feelings in me. It helps to write about it to someone else. Thanks for being there for me.
Take care, Jesse


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2018


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I felt like I was reading through decades of a sister's life in reading this. It reminded me of how my younger daughter feels about connecting with her older sister who's too busy with mothering to be able to call and just talk. Well done in showing us how life can just speed by and how we need to take time to nurture relationships.

"Months of unfulfilled tomorrow's" (tomorrows) I've checked a couple of sources and the lean to this instead of the apostrophe.


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
    Yes, Helene. Sometimes we get caught up in the hustle and bustle of life that we neglect people who we love, assuming they will always be there.

    I hope your daughters improve their communication soon.

    You are correct, the plural of tomorrow is tomorrows. Thank you that catch and your beautiful starlit review.
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Hello Poetic Friend,
Ah! I am hoping that I interpreted your well-executed poetic offering correctly, and that the sister phoned before it was too late...in spite of time and distance. Yes. So caught up in the daily routine of "getting ahead" we sacrifice so many human relationships. Well-stated...
One small nit: Last stanza: first line: tomorrow's (tomorrows)

Thank you for sharing!
diane


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
    You interpreted the poem correctly, Diane. She phoned before it was too late.

    Thank you for the review and correcting that nit. Much appreciated.
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This is a very well written poem about not putting off today what needs to be done until tomorrow. You used very good words and very good imagery from the art work. It makes me think of my sister who I lost in death about 20 years ago. The night before she died she called where I worked, but I was too busy to talk. I will regret that forever! love, Teri


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
    Wow, Teri, I am so sorry to hear about your sister. My condolence. Please forgive yourself. Your sister knows you love her. She wouldn't want you to spend your life in regret.

    Thank you for sharing, your review and the six stars.

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Excellent message and theme. Great pace and flow. All to often we put off actions that we think we have time for later. No one is guaranteed that time. I love the last line. Very good. Hugh


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
    Thank you for the lovely review and input, Hugh
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Hello Poetic Friend
I love how you brought how the feeling of the rival feeling between siblings to take time to make that call to mend the rival feeling, yes call now, not tommorw
Gert


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 03-Oct-2018
    Thank you, Gert. Actually, sibling rivalry did not break the sisterhood bond, instead it was procrastination. Thank you for the thoughtful review, continual support, and the six glowing stars. Much appreciated.

reply by Gert sherwood on 03-Oct-2018
    You are welcome Poetic Friend
    Gert
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