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An attempt at movement in a very narrow form

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DonandVicki
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unfaithful, cheating, and lying will break hearts and it breaks God's heart most of all. the art work that you chose to enhance your work was a good choice.


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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your comments.
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Nice work up for your poem and IF A GOOD TIME WAS HAD BY ALL I GUESS IT WAS IN ORDER SICE SHE HAD NOTHING TO LOSE. An ONE NIGHT STAND.


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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
    Interestingly, with the added picture, I have had people take the POV of all three characters, which I guess tells us something else. Thanks for your comments.
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I appreciate the originality and the creativity of this five - seven - five wherein you have to fit a phrase 'Married, are you? ' somewhere in the poem. I believe there's perhaps a double meaning in the last line. But either way, I liked it. Best wishes.


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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
    There could be more than two meanings at the end. I have found it very interesting that readers seem to be identifying with all three of the figures I present in the picture. The responses have been fascinating. Thank you for your comments.

reply by victor 66 on 11-Oct-2018
    You are most welcome, Lance.
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His Grayness
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Way out there the bingo grinder has a syntax issue and will not likely generate anything to come but alas something likely to go instead, but certainly matrimony is not in the cards! Chuckles are most likely! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance


 Comment Written 10-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
    Thank you for that, sir. I thought it was funny too, although you and I are certainly in the minority.

reply by His Grayness on 11-Oct-2018
    Oh well! there's not too many crowds and waiting lines in the minority! So I'll gladly live with it!. Eager to see more of your thoughts! Vance
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Well, I haven't resorted to a bingo grinder yet, lol, or any of the other incentives you shared with us. Great little prompt entry, though. Moral of the day, don't chase after married women. :)) Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra x


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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
    Thank you for the comments. This was written around 4AM and I was getting pretty delusional, which likely accounts for the biographical information. Thanks again.
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We all have our share of disappointments when the one we want to be with goes to someone else for a relationship. But, I think that your point of view of it is pretty funny. It is a very funny satire poem. Nice work!


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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
    Thank you. I have gotten a number of responses to this, most of them very interesting. Along with me and one other person, you are the only one to say they thought this was funny. I thought it was funny. Thanks again.

reply by Raul1 on 11-Oct-2018
    You're welcome
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Sounds like someone weighing his options. If she's married maybe she'll be experienced enough to make things happen. In any case, it sounds like someone is taking advantage of the anonymity of the blind contest to cut loose of restraints for a moment. Good on ya. Good luck in the contest.


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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your comment. Honestly, this would have been my entry (probably) had the contest not been blind. I do not censor myself. Thanks again.
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A creative take on the "Married, are you" writing prompt. Quite a challenge to complete but I think you accomplished the task very well.

Blessings
Janet


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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your generous comments.
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With the warning, it tells the tale, yet, though it does, it still opens various scenarios of what takes place. Such is the power of poetry, as well the words you chose to use.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar


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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018
    Thank you. It has been interesting in the responses to see which point of view readers take based upon the picture. All three of them have been represented.
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Sounds like the question asked of a person who she commits adultery with. I think all the l's in whirl are the try at creating movement in the poem. Maybe the movement of the woman between relationships and of sex.

Good luck and keep writing

dragonpoet


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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018
    Thank you very much. The 'l's' were meant as motion and a fleeting burst of passion in the moment. Thanks again.

reply by dragonpoet on 10-Oct-2018
    You are most kindly welcome.

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