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The Reasons Not to Pretend


A structured commentary on something less pure.

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Hello there, Lance. For someone very tired, you did a great job on this miniute poem. The raw truths of life. lol. Nicely done! Good luck! ~Kerry


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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
    Thank you. I just wanted to play with a contest.
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I couldn't agree more, Lance. Why work so hard at the lies, when honesty is so much easier? Perhaps people are afraid that they won't be valued for who they really are. We were raised to value the opinions of others; I've tried so hard to break out of that superficial mold and teach my daughter to be herself, not someone she feels will fit in. Time will tell how good a job I did. All the best, Ann Marie


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    Thank you. My kids have entered the obnoxious years where they feel the need to contradict everything my wife and I say to them or tell them and all they want to do is argue. But at least keeping that up with them keeps them from quite so easily bending to another's will. I am hoping for that ultimate freedom as they grow out of their teenage years, and not the other dangers that can come from maintaining such arrogance later in life. I have to admit to having fun, sometimes, shutting them down.
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So many pretend to be what they are not to get by only the best see right through them and wonder how they function in this not so perfect world.


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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
    Even the 'best' are frequently also guilty of faking who they are. Thank you for your comments.
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Hello Lance, a well written Minute poem with correct syllable count throughout. I like the content. I do not know about the rhyme scheme. I always thought it had to be abab - could be wrong. However, I wish you luck in the contest with this fine presentation. Warm regards Dorothy


 Comment Written 15-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
    I didn't notice that there even was a rhyme scheme and I am not all that familiar with the style. I just stuck to syllables. Thank you for your comments.
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I don't know what the restrictions of a minute poem are, but I like what you wrote. You always seem to come up with the right thing to say in your writing. Don't keep this bottled up write, write,write! Good luck in the contest.


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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your usual kind words, Earl.
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Pretending we're something we're not can get really old, really fast. Worst of all is when the one we are trying to fool is ourselves. Of course, we all do it, some more than others. The best approach is to not obsess about what other people think.

At least, that is the gist of what I get from your minute poem, and I have to say, if that was your intention, I wholeheartedly agree.


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2018
    Thank you. It really isn't my place to tell you what my intentions were with this piece. It might ruin it for you, or else justify your opinion. I appreciate your comments and I am pleased that you got something out of it. It came surprisingly easily for such a limited required structure.

reply by CD Richards on 14-Oct-2018
    It's just as well I didn't ask you to, then ;-)
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are strong, creative and interesting.
The reader thought about just being ourselves without pretending.
The author's words are thought provoking and challenging.


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your generous remarks. I am nothing if not honest about myself and the world as I see it, flaws and all.
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We were on the same wavelength ! I've been thinking lots about lies and why we do it. Your poem is honest and is about being honest. That's why I like it. Truth is good medicine!I wish you well in the contest!


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your comment. I have gotten to a point in my life that I just can't deal with dishonesty any longer. Of course I have lost a number of friends as a result, and certainly I wind up pissing a whole lot more off. But it means something, at least to me, in this world that has decided to invent its individual variations of truth.
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Well tired author, I agree. I've reached an age and a certain maturity where if I impress someone, it's an accident. I work at not trying to be a hypocrite. Most of the time I'm successful. If you are really good at something, you don't need to tell people. They already know. Best wishes.


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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2018
    I am right there with you. I'm old enough to not really care what people think of or about me. I don't know that it ever really mattered that much in the first place. Although, I suppose, I must exclude my family from that statement. I mean, I know why they hate me, and it is mostly well earned. Thank you for your comments.

reply by victor 66 on 15-Oct-2018
    You're welcome, Lance. If you've earned hate from your family, perhaps give that a second thought. Just a suggestion.
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I like the flow of this minute poem. You write very well. The last line threw me for a loop. Forgetting Love. I'm not sure what it means in relation to the rest of the poem but it sounds very deep. :)

-Kay


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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2018
    The 'forgetting love' is more about not obsessing over yearnings or unfulfilled desires. Thank you for your generous comments.

reply by Kay Seed on 14-Oct-2018
    Ooooh I see it now. Thanks for explaining. :)

    -Kay
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