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from Recording Editorial History


This is a revised version of my first main post on the blog

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I enjoyed reading this, and you make some very good points. Basically, it's a portrait of a bully, with a glance back at history to see where this could lead if we are not careful. You present an articulate and convincing argument. Now we need to teach Trump to read so he can learn and improve from this. (If only)


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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
    Trump, as people have been saying for a while now, is merely a symptom of a broken society. Another person once said that we elect who we deserve. Looking around at the greed and selfishness and pettiness of our culture, there is little doubt that we deserve him. Even the most anti-Trump people (I guess I would be considered among them) are so absolutist in their rage that there is very little difference between them and the radical followers. The end result will likely be some sort of reformation of priorities after a pretty nasty war. This is what has happened in the past under similar social circumstances (although we are even more impatient and mindless due to technological advances the our modern times), and there is no reason to think that history will not repeat itself, as it always has. Thanks again.
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Dear Lance,

I agree with a lot you say here but don't think our President is as dark as you paint him. In my opinion, he is a bully who must have been bullied by his father. I don't like his incivility and crassness at all. As my football coach in high school used to tell us, "Remember you are representing the school so be respectful of your opponent." I think hate is too strong a word to use in regard to Trump. I don't think he hates America but because of his personality is unable to express himself in a dignified and respectful manner. One of his problems is he doesn't read and relies on television to get his news. To me he is a grown man who never escaped his teen years. I don't understand his xenophobic stance or his disdain of diversity. However, if he pulls off denuclearizing North Korean and solving the Iran crisis I will give him kudos. If he also solves the Chinese Trade problem I will also give him kudos. Let's hope he pulls them off. I would never vote for the man but if he is successful in these three areas he will deserve much credit.

Your piece could be improved by eliminating most ly words and also writing a more balanced essay. (the main reason for the four stars) As I pointed out, the President might be successful using his tactics, deplorable as they are. (LOL)

Regards,

Winslow


 Comment Written 16-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
    It is an introduction to something called 'Recording Editorial History,' which is a study of how different beliefs throughout world history have actually influenced society. It deals with a degradation of truth as it relates to ideas on freedom, democracy, human rights, economics and any issue that might momentarily take place. As for Trump, you're right. It isn't hatred. What he experiences is the actual opposite of love. It is indifference. And Korea, again if we can look at history outside of American failures of the past, should prove that this is the same tactic both the grandfather and father used to mislead many nations in the world as their lone goal has always been an arms race since the nation split into two (actually for about 3000 years before that too, with non-stop civil wars between cousins who each wanted to be emperors). Chinese Trade problem? You know how to make things worse? Trump does. Put everything on credit. Refuse to pay the creditors. It's okay. He knows how to bankrupt a business and funnel whatever assets there are before filing into another arm of his companies. The only problem? A nation does not work like a business. This is why American history is filled with economic panics beginning in 1795, roughly every six years or so, and three major depressions, in 1873, 1894 and 1929. Each situation not only crumbled the economy--of the whole world--but also destroyed the job market, created new fundamentalist and radical organizations on every political side, inspired revolutions throughout the world and led to major international wars. And look at where we are today. Here are some names worth mentioning in line with Trump: Andrew Johnson. Grover Cleveland. Warren G. Harding. The three presidents who presided over the economic depressions (or at least we the direct cause of them through their economic policies that ignored the improvement of the nation and thought only of the cynical, economic bottom line.
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Thank you for these insightful posts, Lance Polin.

I think you already know how much I appreciate what you have to say bzw. write, so I'll only end up repeating the same old praise again and again. You're are doing something worthwhile here, and we should all be glad you share them with us.


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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
    Thank you. I go on quite a few public platforms. I ultimately use my idea of truth as a marketing tool, pissing off just enough people to have developed quite a following, and finding a handful who consider what I am saying, agree or disagree, and think about some of the aspects of their beliefs that might be questionable. Thanks again.
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Hi, Lance,

Thank you for taking the time to explain 'editorial history.' This concept isn't common, and so many people are wondering if you are presenting a history paper OR a commentary.

I found this interesting to read and it flowed well.

~MP~


 Comment Written 15-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
    Thank you. It's really a combination of a variety of things. Since I hold that all studies of history are more or less a discussion of legends--stories maybe true, possibly not, and subsumed by the editorial viewpoint of the writer--whether hero-worship, vilification, or some other perspective being promoted. I fanatically read history books. I have learned a great deal. The primary lesson, I believe, is what I am attempting with this work: I want to study the different beliefs that people have had about authority, government, religion and freedom, as well as numerous other issues that crop up along the way. Hardly anyone ever agrees on anything. I want to discover how this has impacted human civilization.

reply by Mustang Patty on 15-Oct-2018
    Interesting project. I suggest reading sociology books, too. Having the historical angle coupled with sociological information is key,

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Hello, Lancee. I am glad to see such an intelligent human being is still around. Your writing is impeccable in my opinion. I may not believe in everything you say, but damned close to it.

"This is a man who has barricaded himself from the truth."

What a great way to describe this man.

I think your entire theory is jarring yet true blue.

My brother worked for Associated Press and just retired in january. He was a top reporter during the Reagan era, and he an dI have some dandy discussions regarding how we have gotten where we are. I know you two would love to pick each other's brains.

I find your writing top notch and woul donly suggest one thing if you would like more opinions on your Points of View.

Brief them up a bit. I started to look at your piece on FDR and cringed quite frankly. Mostly because although interesting a scan be, time is of the essence when it comes to earning your keep on this site.

All in all, do the same great writing, but try to avoid the temptation to go on and on with each post. No matter what you pay the reviewers, people will balk. I have been here for over 14 years and know. Take care, my friend. Bob


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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
    I understand what you are saying about the length. I also realize that these pieces get far less views than the poems or brief stories. But this is part of a much larger work--a book--and I am only publishing second/third drafts, ultimately incomplete (at least as far as the wrap around between chapters) to get some sample opinions and some free editorial tips. Thank you for your comments. I will likely publish very few more of these on here, because as we get closer to when my life began and these issues began to affect and influence me and my observations directly, I will wind up having a lot more to say. Perhaps I should just publish Millard Fillmore or Rutherford B. Hayes, each of which is around one page in a Word document. FDR was twenty.

reply by Mastery on 16-Oct-2018
    Great Lance. I look forward to your posts. Bob
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Seeing Trump as a wannabe God or even a fascist is a stretch. Liar, Bully, and Brat are more his speed. The first two take ambition and hard work, neither of those things Trump has. Trump is like a magician at a children's birthday party. He's bad enough that there are two types of people in the audience, those that are entranced with the show and those who heckle every trick. As far as your editorial goes, it's well written though I don't agree with every point you made, I respect your opinion.


 Comment Written 15-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
    Fascism is not the same thing as Nazism. I believe, like all bullies, he is so terrified and cowardly that he must invent a persona meant to be strong in order to deny his terror to himself; his inability to adapt or understand the world that he lives in. But I think it is a mistake to dismiss him as some lucky hack. He is a very talented salesman. He understands how to strip aside the reality of any issue and to turn it into a petty shouting match between angry and irrational people. It is a form of thought control and he is awfully good at it, leading the blind into the blind.
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Damn, where do I begin? Please realize this is my opinion and not based on any true facts or proven theory. Hell, I barely got through high school. While you are a avid historian, I can't name all fifty states.

But I am fairly good at understanding the motivations of my fellow humans. When in doubt, I pull up Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs and usually find my answer. The simplicity of his theory intrigues me and depresses the shit out of me, all at the same time.

Your essay or rant or, as you call it, Editorial History seems to be a continuous stream of internal dialogue. It's almost as if we were sitting together and you unloaded your thoughts onto me.

I'm giving you five stars because you have the talent to write down what is churning around in your brain. Not an easy thing to do. (JMO) (just my opinion.) (Not the "easy" part, the "churning" part.)

As with all brain-dumps, your piece can use a bit of editing. But I'm not here to edit your work. Hell, if I'm going to edit something, I'll slog though my own brain-dump ramblings.

Back to Maslow's theory. The first two are no-brainer's.
When people are focused on their very survival, they seldom think about anything else. But once they have a roof over their head, their needs turn more psychological. Pesky stuff; love, acceptance, stature, self-actualization.

Blah blah blah.

Here's my take on most people, at least the people I've met in my 70 years on this planet. Most don't think. At least nothing original. They parrot what they hear and what they agree with. They are sheepish, they follow the herd. It's just easier. It is the path of least resistance. And it does not interfere with their leisure time. Beer is important. And football. And shopping for new shoes.

If it were not for their "Group" they'd have no personality at all. They need to group to be able to see their reflection in the mirror. It is who they are. Without the group they would be forced to think on their own. God forbid!

Donald Trump is a full blown Narcissist. Classic case. I don't fault Donnie. It's not his fault. I'm even having a hard time finding fault with my friends and relatives who support him. Apparently, I've failed them. (It's always about me...pfft.)

For me, the scariest people in the world are "True Believers". I understand greedy bastards and power-hungry control freaks. I'm okay with them. I always know their next move. I just don't bend over in front of them or share my passwords.

But those True Believers...wow! There is no cure. No rationale that works. How can I compete with that whole, "Everlasting Life" sell? Fuck. Impossible.

They are in the ultimate club. They are hanging with the really Big Guy, numero uno. What a fucking rush! The Big Guy listens to them! How awesome!

Fuck, my Mother won't even listen to me! But they got God on speed dial. Way Cool!

See, it's hopeless.

I get Donald Trump. I understand him. I can anticipate every stupid thing he's going to do before he even does it. He's text book.

It just breaks my heart that my friends are so gullible. But then, maybe it's my fault. My fault for not manipulating them into the light. My fault for not conning them over to my way of thinking. Because, reasoning with them has not worked.

Pity.

Anyhoo. Thanks for the rant, essay. It got my mental juices flowing...and, let's not forget, it's always about me.

Zee



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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
    Your statement, half in jest, 'it's always about me' is, to my way of seeing things, the deepest problem with all of human history. A discussion of this is one of the main goals. By 'Recording Editorial History' the emphasis of the project is a historical evaluation of the different beliefs (some of them horrifying 'true' beliefs--I am with you on true believers) people have had about freedom, democracy, leadership and the numerous social issues that impact society from moment to moment and generation to generation. It is my belief that by understanding disagreements on what is true, we can understand the ambitions and direction society will take and continue taking. Thank you for your comments.
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This was well written and Rich in Theme and Imagery.
And it read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024


 Comment Written 15-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your comments. You have a great day too (even though you wrote this a day or so ago).
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Your expose on the collective national psyche was interesting to read. I liked how you were building your points until you started talking about the President. Your tone and reasoning changed at that time and you became what you had debunked in the beginning. Your tone sounded unreasonable and you began to advocate a social civil war. You lost me there because I was reading a well reasoned thought process that turned quickly into a rant. It stopped being editorial.


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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
    An editorial is an opinion. Recording Editorial History. This is what some people believe. Other pieces come from a very different point of view. I mentioned that sometimes I argue things I do not necessarily believe. It is about opinions, about beliefs. That generally has very little to do with reality..
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Hello Lance, after considering your work, I don't think it is deserving of a good rating after our discussion, I am not wasting my time on sheer conjecture. I am also glad you don't know me, lol Have a nice life in your guessing game.

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 Comment Written 15-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
    The wars of the 20th century, and every century since man began interacting with itself, have all been about religion. Nationalism is a religion. Nazism, Communism, belief in a monarchy, the worship of money and property--all of these things are secular religions, to say nothing of the more traditionally considered faiths that ignite passions and proclaim themselves the absolute truth. And as for Trump . . . it is a mistake to call a creature like him a puppet. Other leaders have been puppets of other entities or belief systems or basic industries. This man;s self-absorbed cynicism is different. It is more in line with a Nero than a mere Warren G. Harding. And make no mistake: this is a person that will be long remembered in history, in whatever sort of mutation the future transforms him and his time into. Trump is not being controlled by anyone. He simply does not care. About anything. This is why he is so dangerous. He represents us--even the world. This is where we have fallen. It isn't his fault. It is all of our fault. We did this. It is what we deserve.

reply by Alexander Vasa on 15-Oct-2018
    We will have to agree to disagree, Ana. :)

reply by Alexander Vasa on 15-Oct-2018
    You don't see the real power players Lance, because they don't want to be seen.

reply by Alexander Vasa on 15-Oct-2018
    And ideologies, are not religions, they might be to you, and on that rests your argument, but they are not claiming to be, or know and expound upon, God.

reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
    I don't see them because hidden cabals are merely unknown excuses to explain the mysteries of the world. Like religion. It is all the same thing. There is no cabal, no Illuminati. All there is is disorganized and individual corruption. Nothing is secretive. People just don't care.

reply by Alexander Vasa on 15-Oct-2018
    No, Lance, that's a cop-out answer from someone that doesn't know who they are, and hasn't answered the question. They own the banks, Lance, the banks where Trump has his money, Art galleries that people assume are owned by the government, are actually their facilities to house their personal collections and the public pay to preserve them. But you won't see their daughters in the who's who with the Trumps or the Hilton Paris, they're just not there. I could name names, but I can't, for obvious reasons, but why don't you see them? Aren't these big families having girls? Yes, they are, but you won't see them in the who's who along with royal family members from around the world. Think about it, who's with the magazines and the paparazzi following in hot pursuit? It might sound innane, but if you could answer that, you would know the families I'm talking about. They aren't cabals, and they're not Illuminati or Freemasons, they're flesh and blood people. Follow the money, always follow the money.

reply by Alexander Vasa on 15-Oct-2018
    Whose faces are missing in the media machine that is feeding all of this? It's not who you see, it's who you don't see.

reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
    You have merely renamed them, these shadowy figures. Why not just call them The Elders of Zion? Why not call them the reptilians inside this hollow earth. There is no grand conspiracy because no one agrees. You are arguing 'God.' That is more about not knowing anything. Give an easy answer to cover and blame all corruption.

reply by Alexander Vasa on 15-Oct-2018
    Goodbye Lance, there's just no talking to some people, you are so fixated on the fact that you know everything and you are out to prove everyone else wrong. You will never answer the question that way and consider the fact that I may just be right. But you obviously know none of them, or they would have resonated with you, just like I didn't know any of the people in the last review I wrote, that's life, bye, and I'll end it here. Ana. :)

reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
    Oh, I have heard your theory and I have addressed it rather thoroughly elsewhere. It is exactly the same as views from the past that are nervous explanations to the chaos of the world. Here's a quote from over 100 years ago: "Driven by their quest for money, (they) have been said to assassinate (world leaders) and to create virtually every war since the 1800s in order to finance both sides. . . They would, and continue, to do anything for money. . . .I care not what puppet is placed upon the throne of England to rule the Empire on which the sun never sets. The man who controls Britain's money supply controls the British Empire, and I control the British money supply." Know where that comes from? That is from the Protocols of the Learned Elders of Zion. Does it sound familiar?
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