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An angry girl wants to humiliate her sister.

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Sounds like sister rivalry at its worst but then again most sisters are jerks right? Not all siblings get along or not in my family at least one day it's all they do is hate each other.


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
    That is sadly the truth. My brother and I have not spoken in nearly 25 years. We didn't have a fight either. I mean, neither of us particularly liked the other when we were growing up, but it just ceased to exist. It is partially our own fault, and partially the contemporary world's cynicism and indifference. Thank you for your comment.
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That was weird in a good way, and creative too. Nice work, having only 150 words. It was a complete story about a woman that would embarrass her sister even if it meant getting sick. I wish you good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
    I have been to weddings were family were targeting family. In college one of my many jobs was as a catering bartender. Many times there would be people coming up to me, usually the bride, groom or one of the close relatives of either giving me instructions to make someone's drink into a double or a triple or all booze with just a touch of color to disguise it. One groom actually said to me, "I want to see that bitch make a fool of herself!" Thank you for your comments.
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Good luck in the contest. This was short but very informative. I do apologize but as I tried to visualize the cat, the wedding, the fact that the cat became an escort and the sisters, I truly had to laugh, it was hilarious. I am not sure if it was humiliation or revenge but either way, it was accomplished. I really appreciated your narrative notes, they provided even more information. Thanks so much for sharing, I have had my daily chuckle. (smile)


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
    Oh, thank you very much. So many people take things far too seriously. I thought this was a bit of a joke. It is far from my best work, but it was fun to write and careful enough to hit exactly 150. Some reviews have discussed the sad tribulations of family not staying together or the gloom of modern romance. All I saw was a drunk girl with a fat, lazy cat with a God-complex. Thanks again.

reply by aryr on 24-Oct-2018
    You are so welcome.
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This story tells pretend romance of a sister; Anna took her pet cat Creator to the wedding of her sister but the sick cat died of cat HIV and Anna also got sick but she never spoke to her sister; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR


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    Thank you for your comments.
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