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Bewitching Halloween


Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Corrupted Ghouls"

Poems fun and scary

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Ooh what a difference between the saved souls beyond Heaven's gates and those corrupted ghouls forever fearful. Great Halloween rhyming poem Marilyn, enjoyed it,
cheers,
valda


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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Hi Valda. Thank you so much for your wonderful review. So appreciated. Marilyn
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Marilyn, you have really awoken the chills in my mind with this dark poem, out of all the Halloween poems I've read this is by far the eeriest one, aided by the excellent rhythm and wonderful rhyming this was just fantastic.
Terrific writing my friend
Mitchell


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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
    Hi Mitchell. Thank you for your wonderful review and comments. Halloween is always a fun time to let the ghouls loose. :) Marilyn
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Thanks for helping me celebrate Halloween--I live on a hill and up thirty-two stairs; so, no one ever comes to our place to share their festivities! I admired your rhymes and use of alliteration. Here's to being bewitched! -Joan


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
    Hi Joan. Thank you for your nice review. I don't have 32 steps, but I don't encourage trick or treaters either. For one thing, my doggy gets too excited when guests come to the door. To be opening and closing it for trick or treaters (or worse) won't work for me. But, I do like Halloween and went to a party today to celebrate. Marilyn

reply by Joan E. on 31-Oct-2018
    I am glad you partied--the closest I came was wearing camouflage pants and drama-queen sunglasses. Smiles- Joan

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    Setting a new trend.

reply by Joan E. on 31-Oct-2018
    I don't know about that--just the best I could do with limited energy! Hugs- Joan
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This is a wonderful and eerie Halloween poem, Marilynn. Great rhyme throughout.
Nice alliteration as well. Happy Halloween. Good luck! ~Kerry


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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
    Hi Kerry. Thank you for reviewing this one. Happy Halloween. Marilyn

reply by Kerry Robinson on 06-Nov-2018
    You're very welcome, Marilyn:))
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Wow. This is a scary piece, "corrupted ghouls lie ever after secreted within earth's catacombs." Although it did not occur to me (maybe because I live more of a solitary life as a single guy), Halloween is tomorrow. Nice.

Phillip


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2018



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    Hi Phillip. Thank you for your super review, comments, and rating. Marilyn

reply by pbomar1115 on 30-Oct-2018
    You're welcome, Beas.

    Phillip
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Wow. Very spooky, Marilyn. Why did you not enter this in the Halloween poetry contest. You may have already entered though. anyway, I like the way this one flows:

"Writhing in fear, they'll meet their master.
Salvation doomed, eternity looms."

Excellent! Bob


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
    Hi Bob. Thank you. I had already entered "Magic" in the contest which was illustrated by my beautiful cat. Marilyn

reply by Mastery on 30-Oct-2018
    Ah, yes. Bob
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Well done Marilyn, you've written an unusual rhyming poem, two sextet quatrains with ababab rhyming in both, an beautifully scribed and crafted, to skilfully have opposing destinations, for Earth's human denizens, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : giles. Guiles?


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
    Hi Roy. Most definitely "guiles." I think the speller self-corrected to "giles." Not the word I intended at all. Thank you for calling attention to it. I fixed it. Marilyn

reply by royowen on 30-Oct-2018
    Well done Marilyn
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This certainly makes one anxious to pass muster
and make it through Heaven's Alabaster Gates Marilyn. I wouldn't want to be stuck forever in the catacombs fighting off ghouls for eternity. Not in the contest I see. Well done. Nancy:)


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
    Hi Nancy. Thank you for your nice review. Marilyn
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That's what I'd call a Halloween nightmare!! To know after death, hell was waiting. You should have entered this in the Halloween contest...corrupted ghouls...what could be scarier?? Loved this!
Blessings...


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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
    Hi Judy. Thank you so much for your super review. I entered "Magic" in the contest with the image of my beautiful kitty, Jewel. I had lots of fun writing both that one and this one. Wow! Halloween is tomorrow and we'll put the horror to bed for another year (I hope). Marilyn

reply by Irish Rain on 30-Oct-2018
    Yep, tomorrow I'll be passing out the goodies...this year I bought the stuff WE like...in case we get stuck with it, ha ha.

reply by Irish Rain on 30-Oct-2018
    Just checked out your 'Magic' poem again to make sure it's the one I thought. It is...LOVE it!!!!
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Terrific, Marilyn! Creepy picture. Creepy poem. It doesn't get any better than this for Halloween. Great word choices and abundant use of alliteration make this one terrific poem. I especially love "there tinkles loving lilting laughter". I really love the message you've conveyed in this piece ... be good so you go to heaven and not to hell; and you said it SO very well!

Hugs,
Connie


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2018



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
    Hi Connie. Thank you for your fabulous rating and comments on this piece. We have just one more day to write about horror and ghouls and such. Then--no more until next Halloween. May as well take advantage of the opportunity to get it all out of our system. LOL! Hugs, Marilyn
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