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Silence.


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duchessofdrumborg
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"Silence" is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.


 Comment Written 03-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 06-Nov-2018
    Sanku, you're very welcome.

    Take care and bless you,
    the Duchess
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etreefrog
 
 
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You've captured a unique portrait of a fickle character we all know. Very well done. Since you post with an idea to honing your submissions, I assume, I will be bold and suggest a couple of things, albeit probably clumsily. My apologies in advance!
My ear says that On the witching hour might make easier reading as In the witching hour, but it may be an expression with which I'm not familiar.
I would look again at the use of (.), that is, the periods. They don't seem to uniformly end sentences. If you use them at all (and I don't have a strong opinion either way!), I would use them consistently. One is used inappropriately, I believe, after: "with her hearts speak to each other. without words"
Finally, it seems too removed to say "she could tear" when she actually does tear... , so I would toughen that up to reflect the damage she does.

These are all minor quibbles, in the service of your art, which you are obviously mastering. It's a beautiful piece, delicate, poignant and such a mature way to vent!!
thanks, Erik


 Comment Written 03-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
    Thank you so much. i am honoured that you cared enough to suggest these faults. I will correct them. Some of them are silly and I should have seen it myself.(on instead of in and the full stop)
    I will edit it immediately

reply by etreefrog on 11-Nov-2018
    Hi, you were kind to review me before; could I ask you to look at "We're All Listening"? It doesn't pay much and disappears tomorrow morning, but I would like to know what you think...
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Old Soldier
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Well written. Lots of emotion and life. If only they would share. I really like this. Nothing like heart felt art. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing, reading and reviewing.


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.
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Michele Harber
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This is a very clever poem, and an excellent entry in the Free Verse Poetry Contest. I enjoyed your personification of Silence, and your pointing out how silence can be a double-edged sword: welcome when we want peace and solitude, and unwelcome and dangerous when keeping silent allows evil or negative things to occur. I wish you luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    THank you very much.
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Meia (MESAYERS)
 
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I know just how you feel. Recently betrayed big time by not one but two close friends on separate occasions. Seems I needed to be there for them always but I deserve no help when I need it. I bent over backwards. Anyway this is a wonderful poem fresh with incredible talent and excellent word choice I loved it kindest regards Meia xx


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    THank you very much once again and especially for the shining stars.
    TRue it hurts when friends betray us.
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Gert sherwood
 
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Hello Sanka
I say you have a very original poem about being silent and how anyone that keep his/her silence to themselves to me is not a bit appropriate
These three lines drew my attention with you excellent paradox
With her, hearts speak to each other.
Without words by being silent is being doubled faced
Gert



 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much
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victor 66
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There are somethings that can be forgiven and there are some that cannot. I have a hard time getting to know people because I'm always suspicious of their intent. The few friends I have, I trust. Others don't come that close to me, so they don't matter and are not given much thought. I understand and appreciate your poem. best wishes.


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.

reply by victor 66 on 05-Nov-2018
    You are most welcome.
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Maria Jose Garcia
 
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What an interesting notion! I love how you personify Silence and speak of her two faces. I had always regarded silence as something negative myself... Well, maybe not always. It's great when my family finally go to sleep and I have the house to myself.
Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    THank you very much.
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OMG, Sanku, I feel so bad that I have not got six stars left for this outstanding, original-sounding poem. It is absolutely wonderful from beginning to end. Lines like these:

"On lonely mountains even with the chuckling brooks."

And: "She is empty but looms large.
Like a shadow on a lonely side street."

Bravo! Bless you, Sanku. You nailed it, my friend. :) Bob


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.
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In relationships it is difficult for an outsider to interfere, but this seems like a very personal write, and there is disappointment when someone hasn't given the support they should have, as they are seen as two faced, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    True .But by speaking out if one clear the misunderstanding between two people, why not.
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