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Religion--A Panacea to Mother Earth


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Hello rd,
This is an excellent essay.
One note, the section on Christianity is heavy on Pope Francis and Saint Francis. More diversity might be considered.

a few small suggestions below:

Many great modern spiritual leaders in the west, like Pope Francis and Bishop Desmond Tutu, promote environmentalism as a moral responsibility. They also welcome interfaith interaction. Although religions of the west [do] * tend to treat man as separate from nature, these two leaders bring in their personal mysticism that embraces the awareness of unity and interconnection.

* don't need the "do"

An environmental author, Roderick Nash, says, "In the Far East, the man-nature relationship was marked by respect, bordering on love, absent in the West . . . man was understood to be part of Nature."

This paper aims to show the unifying concepts between religious leaders regarding responsibility for the environment and to expand the interdisciplinary idea by exploring how those concepts echo similar tenets of science. A multifaceted approach linking these various factors with influences from both east and west as well as both ancient and modern times is the ideal we need to strive for.

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Quite a number of modern Christian and Jewish leaders participate in promoting climate change awareness and urging action. There are a few who also promote adopting the concept of unified interconnection as a primary means to achieve that goal.

Christianity
"May the relationship between man and nature not be driven by greed, to manipulate and exploit, but may the divine harmony between beings and creation be conserved in the logic of respect and care."
--Pope Francis, General audience, Vatican City, April 22, 2015

Pope Francis is one of the staunchest modern advocates of conscientiousness regarding climate change. He is well known for deeming it a 'moral responsibility' * [In response to a journalist's probing question regarding the moral responsibility for politicians who refuse to acknowledge climate change or to collaborate with efforts to curb it, he responded, "Whoever denies this should go to the scientists and ask them.] *They speak very clearly. The scientists are precise...Climate change, you see the effects and scientists say clearly which is the path to follow. And all of us have a responsibility...a little one, a big one, a moral responsibility...and we have to take it seriously."

* This part seems wordy; suggest one or the other [refuse to acknowledge climate change] or [to collaborate with efforts to curb it]

Pope Francis gathers much of his inspiration from his namesake, Saint Francis of Assissi, who is--fittingly-- the patron saint of animals and nature. In the above statement, we see how he takes ancient roots and gives them modern significance tied to science [as well]. With his openness to interfaith interpenetration and this synthesized stance, Pope Francis shines as an epitome of what this essay calls for.

* drop the "as well" ?

Otherwise, this is quite an accomplishment that deserves a six.
Best wishes to you.

Robert



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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
    Thanks a ton, dear Robert! I appreciate your astute comments and suggestions. I agree with all of your feedback and the trimming suggestions and have implemented some of them. I'm sure I need to trim some of the Pope-quotes but they are all so good! I'll wait to hear back from the professor I am collaborating with.

    I'm still weighing out whether I want to trim one of these:

    [refuse to acknowledge climate change] or [to collaborate with efforts to curb it]

    As I think it is important to note how thier refusal to acknowledge also leads to thier refusal to make efforts.

    If I have a thumb left to offer, it is yours!

    Warmest Wishes and gratitude,
    rd

reply by rspoet on 08-Nov-2018
    Hello rd,
    My thought on that line was that if they refuse to acknowledge, then it logically follows they would make no efforts. Why would one make an effort if they don't even accept the idea?

reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018
    That's true...I and I agree, except that I wish to highlight the point (for those who may not think it through) that action follows attitude...

    Thanks for following up!

    Warmly, rd

reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
    HI Robert. As per your advice, I trimmed down the Pope section. As per my professor's request, I extended the Amma section. If you have time to read those two sections, I'd love to hear your opinion!

    I also added a line about Inuit and aborigine tribes.
    Warmly, rd

reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
    HI Robert. As per your advice, I trimmed down the Pope section. As per my professor's request, I extended the Amma section. If you have time to read those two sections, I'd love to hear your opinion!

    I also added a line about Inuit and aborigine tribes.
    Warmly, rd

reply by rspoet on 11-Nov-2018
    Hello rd,
    I read the sections again and they seem fine to me. To be honest, the paper is so long it is difficult for me to remember exactly what was in the sections and what has changed.
    You've written a very comprehensive paper
    on the topic. I hope it is published, my friend.
    Best wishes to you.
    Robert

reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
    Thanks for taking time and for your encouraging comments, dear Robert. Much appreciated!
    Warm Wishes,
    rd
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I would be interested to read the connections linking poverty and economic development with climate change as poverty and economic development has been around virtually since the beginning of mankind. But I do agree the ecological crisis is a problem of conscience and lack of trust.

The one thing humanity is going to need to address shortly is overpopulation, and not from the nationalist perspective who by default believe man is the master of the Earth and everything on it.

This is a wonderful comparitive study of the effects of climate change from different denominations. On the whole they all seem to have similar thought processes but the high ideals are not streaming down to the great unwashed. We do need to learn from the lowly frog, yes?

I didn't notice any errors or omissions and congratulations to you for an entertaining and informative essay.

As of today I hold little hope for humanity, but I hope it returns.

Best of luck to you in the contest with the committee dear RD. :)

Gloria









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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
    Thanks for your superb thoughtful comments, dear Yes, let's hope hope returns. I also have doubts that enough of humanity will do what is needed. Overpopulation is a root cause of much of our problems - Amma says so too. In fact, she actually publicly requested her 'children" (Amma means mother) to not have children and to adopt instead.


    Warmest Smiles,
    rd
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Yipes, rd! I spent a couple of hours fashioning a suitable review. Suddenly, my review comes up 'Error'. I lost it all! I'll try to replicate it, rd, but in the meantime, here's my six.

I'm moved by your view of religious ecology. Frankly, I don't think governments are up to the task. I hope religious institutions might take over this mantle. You essays suggests this makes sense.

I'll start over. Meantime, take a bow.

Peace, Lee



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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Oh gosh, Lee...so sorry you lost that long review. That's happened to me a couple of times. I'm deeply pleased this moved you and offered hope too. Thanks for your six stars as well.

    Humble bow.

    Much appreciation for your long efforts...

    Peace, Love, Light and ECOLOGY!
    rd
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Excellently written, put together well in a clear concise manner with a lot of information that I was not aware of.
I gave you six stars here because it was so well researched.
There was a lot of information there, and it's an important step reading and writing this type of subject to increase awareness and enlightenment. I like how you have found a Common Thread with all of them. A lot of information very well put together well researched.
Your quotes and editing are impeccable.

Blessings,

Darren


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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Thanks for your glowing comments and radiant rating, dear Brother Darren, and for taking time to read this long post. I appreciate you!

    Blessings,
    rd

reply by Badger_29 on 15-Nov-2018
    Thank-you, I really enjoyed how this was written, and how it All fits together.
    BB

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
    :-))))) Yay! Great to hear.
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I like this, and I have studied many religions myself. As a Hospice Nurse I have found that if someone has a belief in something they die more peacefully. I have also found that if someone doesn't believe in anything they have a harder death. Well done on this. Keep writing.


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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Thank you, SLM - so glad this resonated with you. Having worked as a chaplain-like role in a hospital in India, I've witnessed the same thing as you regarding those with faith dying more peacefully. Hospice work is a calling...nice to know we share that, kindred soul!

    Lovely to meet you.

    Warmly, rd
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This is a very well-presented essay, that manages to avoid being too dry to absorb. You cover your subject well, presenting the premise with viable evidence to back it up.

On a personal note, whilst welcoming the views of Pope Francis, who has been quite refreshing in his thoughts on poverty, and the wealth of the Vatican, I think the Christian based religions have actually been detrimental to the environmental cause, certainly in the USA, partly because of a refusal to accept the science on this subject, preferring to see environmental changes as god's punishment for mankind's folly in allowing people of the same sex to marry, and so on.

Whilst some of the Bible quotes you present here certainly speak of the environment, unfortunately it seems for many that those are trumped by the statement that mankind is the lord of all creation. Environmental concerns tend to be seen as liberal government plots by more Christian Alt-Right evangelists than any other group.

However, your essay is written to answer a specific point from a particular view, so must include the most widespread religion in the world. Sadly, the environmental message you present here is not being filtered to the wider Christian community in the country with the biggest proportion of Christians.

Christianity has developed as a Western religion, and as such carries the baggage of Western greed, but must also take some responsibility for the separation of man from the land, which your article refers to. Had we not been taught that this was all for us, and that we are masters of it, perhaps things would be very different. There's much we can learn from religions that are less inclined to present mankind in a ruling role.


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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Thanks for your glowing rating and super thoughtful comments. I do agree with you!~ However, this essay wanted to focus on the common ground and Pope Francis and Bishop Tutu are two who find it. It might be optimal for me to include a sentence about how Western religions have proven detrimental...as I agree with you entirely. However, I have reached the word count limit for the essay. I will run your feedback by my professor friend who will be giving input and then adding her name to the paper...If she wants other things trimmed or tightened, I'd have room to add more than this.

    If I could choose the thesis for the essay, I would have written one on exactly what you've said...how the West needs to learn from Eastern and Indigenous cultures. As it is, I could only hint at that in some statements in this essay...because the essay is written as an 'assignment' for this professor...not my choice of title or premise!

    Thanks for taking time to read carefully and share insightful feedback and thoughts. If I have any review thumbs left, one if for you!

    Warmly, rd

reply by Sarkems on 07-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much, and for the thumb. Yes, I appreciate that this is a targeted essay looking at specific things, and maybe highlighting the more proactive views of leaders in the leading Western churches may lead to more open discussion of how perceptions among Western Christians could be changed by these luminaries.

reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Good point! I may include that concept in the next draft...depending on my professor's input. :)
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The post is a little long and very scholarly. Interesting, but yes I believe that religion and morals are definitely connected to how much we care about the environment. In a society where people worship themselves, it's hard to get them to care about the environment.

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Thanks for stopping by. Hmmm - is your rating based on the length and scholarly aspect? The contest allows posts up to 6000 words, so that is not a 'mistake'...and the conference requires as academic writing style--so also not a mistake. So I'm wondering what prompted you to review this is scholarly writing is not to your taste? Ratings should not be based on personal taste but on the quality of the writing...

    Not a complaint...just an observation. Glad you agree with the premise of the essay.

    I recommend not reviewing longer works if you will be rating them down based on length!

    Best Wishes,
    rd

reply by heart of Lou on 07-Nov-2018
    Oh Gosh. Sorry. Yes, I suppose it was just not to my taste and I should not have reviewed it. Lesson learned. I'm no scholar, so it was just too hard for me to read. Thanks for pointing this out.

reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Thanks for your gracious response, Lou. Blessings, rd
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A paper of considerable merit. It is constructive and optimistic in the way that it shows the commonality of purpose of the major world religions when it comes to their core values relating to environmental stewardship.

It points the significant difference between the concept of stewardship and the concept of interdependence. I found your section on the North American Indians held much in common with the beliefs of the Aboriginal people of Australia and the Inuit people of Canada, amongst other so-called 'primitive' theologies. I think it would strengthen your paper to indicate that these earth religions are widespread and not just confined to the US. That, really, is my only comment on the subject matter.

I found the overall balance good, the introduction and conclusion clear and the paper well-reasoned. It required close reading, as one would expect of an academic paper, but was easily digestible.

I noticed one or two edits that you might want to consider:
It's [Its] literal translation means "I am, because you are"
halakhah, which is the Biblical protection for fruit trees and [against] harming the environment.
He further questions how can we [we can] reach a global

Good luck with this paper, RD. I hope that it reaches the right ears and exercises influence for the good of mankind.


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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    Thanks a ton for your super astute review and kind comments as well as the radiant rating, my friend. Deeply pleased this resonated with you and grateful you took the time for that careful read. Thanks for the edits...will take a look.

    I'd also love to include Aboriginal and Inuits...but the word count is a maximum of 6000 and I'm almost to the limit. Perhaps I can simply mention them in one line along with Native Americans? I also did not include Jainism, Sikhism, Confucianism, etc. The scope of the paper might get diluted if I try to include EVERYONE! :)

    At twenty years old, I had some interaction with a medicine man from the Inuit tribe...used to attend his 'Red Cedar Circle'. Also had interaction with two from the Lakota tribes. From 16, I had become a seeker and met gurus and teachers from numerous traditions...

    A thumb coming your way...with much appreciation!

    Warmly,
    rd

reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    PS I revised the Native opening paragraph in the actual essay to:

    Many indigenous cultures have their own Earth-based spirituality. Native American Indians and South American tribes, which also hold much in common with the beliefs of the Aboriginal people of Australia and the Inuit people of Canada. Most indigenous tribes consider Mother Earth as a sort of deity and treat all creation with reverence. Here, we will focus on the Native North American.


    I could not do it here because the FS word counter differs from the Microsoft Word one...and it would go over the max for the contest. In Word, it is 5960 now.

reply by tfawcus on 06-Nov-2018
    Yes, I can see the dilemma! I think that just a sentence or two acknowledging other earth religions would be enough. You are right to concentrate on major religions and groups that many people are familiar with. Unity becomes a more difficult concept, the wider the net is thrown. I appreciate the thumb - most kind! :))) Tony

reply by tfawcus on 06-Nov-2018
    Perfect! :)))

reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Most deserved! :-))))

reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Yay!
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What a wonderful scholarly writing to express information on your topic of religion and Mother Earth. For a formal essay and its intended audience, I feel you have done your research well. I enjoyed how you showed the various view on world religions. Amazing that at the core, there are more similarities than differences. :) And I love the term, "ecological citizenship."


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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thanks for your thoughtful, kind comments and for taking time to read, Cindy. Much appreciated! Warmly, rd
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WITH SO MANY RELIGIONS INVOLVED IT IS A GREAT WORK UP FOR THIS STORY BUT WHEN ALL IS SAID AND DONE WE ARE ALL STRIVING FOR THE SAME THING.


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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Indeed we are. Thanks CRW. Blessings, rd

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    Smiles

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    Smiles

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    smiles

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    Lol
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