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Jesse James Doty
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A very cute and clever title as well as the line above it. The image is absolutely beautiful. You have achieved the necessary components for a true haiku. Each line adds to the image, with the cumulation of the summary in the last line, "perfect oasis." The haiku, along with the clever title and line above, makes for an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse


 Comment Written 01-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
    Hey Jesse... I've been MIA on the site an it is so good to be back... thanks for reading... I've missed your special p.o.v. yours, di

reply by Jesse James Doty on 02-Dec-2018
    Welcome back, Di
    It's nice to be counted on for a special point of view. I enjoyed your piece very much.
    Jesse
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Joan E.
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Yes, your artwork selection is of a "perfect oasis". I admired your use of alliteration to add to the intensity of your description. Best wishes in the haiku competition- Joan


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
    Thanks... I'm crazy for alliteration... thanks for showing up... yours, di

reply by Joan E. on 01-Dec-2018
    That makes two of us! Echoing back at ya- Joan
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Hello diana!
Oh! I want to join you there! What a beautifully inviting scene you have depicted in you haiku. Now...if I may...and I surely do not want to take away from your offering, but it is my understanding that alliteration in haiku is acceptable, but not to be overdone. That said, the last line could possibly be rendered: perfect oasis.
Again, just a suggestion.
So good to read you work again; I've miss you!
diane


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
    Hey... Hey... You know I completely appreciate you help in forming the perfect haiku and will take your advice and will try your suggestion it is lovely... I'm a bit of an alliteration slut... Yours, diana

reply by Mrs. KT on 30-Nov-2018
    Oh diana,
    GAWD! I just choked on my coffee: "alliteration slut!" Love it!
    You go, girl!
    :)
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Waterfalls do seem a little more than average in beauty and in feeling eternal. This is a beautiful place in the artworks. Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing. Happy Holidays.

Joan


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
    Happy Holidays back at 'cha

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    Thanks.

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    Thanks.
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A beautiful almost surrealistic write here, Diana -- I cannot imagine a more wonderful place to get lost and even re-locate! :) ;) I don't even need your chosen picture there to have my mind follow your words to paradise!! :) Just a suggestion, and please feel free to ignore, but I think your rhythm into conclusion would be better served with the switching of 'perfect' and 'pure' such that it reads 'pure perfect place'. Again, your words here are almost magical and I thank you for sharing today! :) ;) Best of luck in the contest! :) ;) Yvette :)


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
    Hey... once again... thanks for actually considering the piece... pure perfect is absolutely right.

reply by Y. M. Roger on 30-Nov-2018
    Love it!! :) You have some of the most wonderful angles on your writes, Diana -- it's no wonder I'm one of your fans!! :) ;) Yvette
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This haiku had a nice slightly off balance tilt that I find aesthetically pleasing in this form; I often use it myself. It was also colorful with that emerald green pool, and sublime with that peaceful waterfall image. Nice alliterations in the last line close it out. I've enjoyed the serenity of waterfalls many times; just this last fall I had a great hike to a peaceful isolated one in Glen Falls south of Highland, NC. I love just sitting there and letting the water wash away all my problems. estory


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
    hey again... again thanks so much kiddo for your positive and thoughtful review. yours, di
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Such a beautiful little haiku- the words, the teal and aquamarine colours and stunning picture really do exude calm and tranquility. Like the use of aliteration- 'perfect pure place'. Purity is exactly the right word to describe the image of that emerald pool. Good luck in the contest and thanks for bringing some tranquility to my day x


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
    Haley... Hi sweetie... thanks so very much for your wonderful, thoughtful and stellar plus/one review. yours, diana

reply by Hayley Zemontas on 02-Dec-2018
    You?re welcome Diana x
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Love the alteration here in the last line, you painted a colourful picture in your Haiku here and I wish you luck with the contest, best wishes, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
    Hey you... Happy Birthday... always look forward to finding you in my shop. yours, di
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Nice to see your name in my inbox again. Welcome back!

What a delightful juxtaposition of images. Superb alliteraiton of P accented by alliteraiton of D and consonance of L. Great word economy. Delightful satori--serene! Lovely presentation. Best wishes in the contest.

Warmly, rd


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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
    rama... I'm honored by your wonderful review. yours, di
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Lovely work. Great use of alliteration with dive deep and perfect pure place. The emerald green water gives the setting a distinctive touch. It sounds pure and soothing. Waterfalls diving into such beautiful water sounds beautiful. Love your title, too. A soothing place to be. judi


 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
    Hey Judiverse thanks for you lovely review...so, so appreciated... yours, diana

reply by judiverse on 02-Dec-2018
    You're very welcome. I loved this. judi
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