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Lost on Planet Z


This is a sci-fi book especially for girls.

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Rating of Chapter 26 -
Goodbye, Part 2
This was an amazing book, Helene. I am so glad that Ash got to send part of her with Hen and that Mr. P and BahBee were thoughtful enough to try with the shove and then the rock. Then BahBee collected the leaves which he gave to Hen. He scooted away to get aboard the shuttle. Hen was heartbroken as she left. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Hugs!


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Wow! You read the whole book in just days! I'm so amazed and honored! Thank you for all your encouragement, Alie!! Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    It was so comfortable to read, the chapters flowed into each other. I know you are fantastic at poetry but a little story writing is great from time to time. So write once in a while, lol. And you are so very welcome, Helene. Hugs!
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Rating of Chapter 25 -
Goodbye - part 1
Goodbyes are horrible, Helene. In fact they are downright torturous. Hen manages to say farewell to her friends- MahMee got the scarf, BahBee got the packaged meal that he presented to Mr. P and Peeztee was given the responsibility of the All-Purpose-Tool and the wheelbarrow. Mr. P reminded Hen that the gift was to all of them but accepted the responsibility. Then Ash has a surprise which we will find in the next chapter. Fantastic and great job, very much enjoyed.


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Thank you for understanding the emotions behind the farewell gift giving. Appreciate you! Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    It was easy to understand, I clued in when the title said 'part 1', it was great and you are most welcome, Helene. Hugs!
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Rating of Chapter 24 -
Protective Lies
What a great continuation chapter, Helene. I loved the picture of the turned leaves. It was great to have Hen converse with Ash, to see Mitya and Joe, to lie about the resources on the planet. Now she has to say goodbye to her friends. I am sure the next chapter which will close this book will be a difficult one to read. Great job thus far. Hugs!


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Thank you, Alie! I hope I didn't disparage the male gender by have the boys be such bullies. You really got the flow of the book.
    Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    Have no worries, Helene. Boys will be boys, its all part of their nature. You know, the superior sex, lol. Wait it is way to early to make me laugh that hard. You are so welcome. Hugs!

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Rating of Chapter 23 -
Old Enemies
What a great continuation chapter, Helene. I think it is great that the Bohdee have reconciled with Mr. P. But it is sad that Mitya and Joe have decided to show up and have no consideration for the communities nor the trees. Hen is worried that she will have to leave Ash behind but first must get rid of the intruders. Great job. Hugs!


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    You think maybe I shouldn't have the boys against girls feeling? I wanted to show the bad things that humans (males or females) do to nature. Thanks again!
    Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    No, I think you got it right, Helene. There will always be boys against girls, males against females regardless of the species. Humans are just humans regardless of their gender. So very welcome. Hugs!
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Rating of Chapter 22 -
Changes on the Horizon
That was definitely an interesting picture, Helene. The fact that Mr. P was researching different things on the shuttle's computer was interesting. Friendships mean a lot to the community as it does to Hen. You did a great thing with this chapter. Greatly enjoyed. Hugs!


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Thank you for understanding the value of friendship and community for these characters! Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    Most welcome, Helene. Hugs!
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Rating of Chapter 21 -
Fruit Burial
That definitely was a great picture, Helene, the bare little branches showed the truth about Ash's words. The entire Bohdee community searched for the recipient tree, which it decided and it would be BahBee's. Mr. P had reconciled with HahMee and then had to rush to the shuttle. Ash was able to explain the need of the continuity between the Bohdee and the trees. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Hugs!


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Thank you so much, Alie! You're helping me remember and gain courage to edit this! Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    This was great Helene, you are most welcome. Now EDIT, lol. Hugs!
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Rating of Chapter 20 -
Healing Begins
I really enjoyed the picture, Helene, you do find some great ones. Mr. P has fainted again and has Hen to guard him. Then MahMee is presented the ugly fruit by Mr. P, she wisely protected her hands and the fruit became a joyous ball. From Ash she learns it will be planted under a tree and prosper. Sadly Ash's leaves do nothing in the healing department, except laughter is the best method of healing. Great job and greatly enjoyed. Hugs!


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Thank you for seeing the value of laughter as part of healing! Your reviews mean so much to me!
    Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    Laughter has always been the best medicine, you are so very welcome, Helene. Hugs!
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Rating of Chapter 19 -
A Bigger Storm
Great picture, Helene. It was wonderful that all the Bohdee were able to construct the almost dome that protected HahMee, Hen, Mr. P and the little ones. Mr. P proved himself when he climbed up Hen to complete the dome, then they all sang which helped disperse the storm. I was impressed that Mr. P that he found his ancestry and then he fainted away again. Great job and greatly enjoyed. Hugs!


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Thank you so much, Alie! You have made me feel I better get on with my rewriting! Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome, Helene. Hugs!
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Rating of Chapter 18 -
Judgment
The picture was interesting because it showed a gavel out of leaves, Helene. Mr. P was curious to know what Hen was doing and she informed him that she was able to talk to Ash. She then advised him that HahMee was on her way. Ash was able to communicate about what was happening via the trees. She was able to tell Hen when Grumps produced the 'forgiveness fruit', what it meant and the process involved. Mr. P was eventually able to pick up the fruit and offer it to HahMee. Then with her refusal came the lightening and thunder and all scurried to form themselves. Great chapter and very much enjoyed. Hugs!


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Thank you, Alie! I think even in good community like the Bohdee have, forgiveness is a key part of sharing the love among the members. Hugs!

reply by aryr on 05-Oct-2021
    It certainly was a challenge picking up the fruit but Mr. P did it. You are so very welcome, Helene. Hugs!
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Rating of Chapter 17 -
Recap of chapters 1-16
I absolutely loved the picture of space, Helene. This was a wonderful recap of the chapters 1-16. It was definitely a refreshing chapter. It was truly a short synapsis of the book thus far. You did a great job and greatly enjoyed. Hugs!


 Comment Written 02-Oct-2021



reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
    Thank you so much for the light-speed review of this book, Alie! Hugs!

reply by aryr on 03-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome, Helene. Hugs!
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