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Child-ish Laborer


How I almost lived with Tarzan.

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LIJ Red
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Good writing, manageable vocabulary and smooth pace, and quite to prompt. Can't judge the content, my youthful environment had less in common with Camden street than outer Mongolia...well said, Lee...


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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
    Thank you, Red. Sometimes I thought Camden Street was Outer Mongolia. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Be from a really large family when you can slip between the cracks and never be noticed. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.


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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
    Thank you, Charlie. Big families created bigger work. I doubt you fell through the cracks. Peace, Lee

reply by c_lucas on 15-Dec-2018
    You're, welcome, Lee.
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what an exciting and entertaining read! I find no fault, the grammar and well organized thought processes led from beginning to end totally flawless.
I remember the Saturday chore day, the Hoover, or was it electrolux? the unfair work status among siblings too.
You bring back so many memories. Thank God you can laugh about it all so many years later!


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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
    Thanks so much, LaRosa. I share these stories with my two siblings--they both admit they were better at skating chores than I was. And I was the youngest? Anyway, so glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by LaRosa on 15-Dec-2018
    It's good that you still have a close and loving relationship with your siblings, to even be able to share about the 'good ole days'. :)
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I do understand completely. My parents worked all week and cleaned house on Saturday. I worked all week and my husband being military was usually gone somewhere, training or deployed, so my four boys and I had to clean house on Saturday. I think I heard a few choice words from them once in a while. LOL I loved your contest entry and wish you luck.


 Comment Written 09-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
    Thank you, Barbara. Saturday was chore day for everyone. In retrospect, I can appreciate my mother's use of 'enforced labor'. But I still enjoy playing the bratty kid. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Hahahaha, Lee, this is wonderful. I smiled and laughed all way through. How hard it was to be a boy, ehh? Whereas, your sister could waltz off to dance classes. I'm sure you're scarred for life. Great entry. Good luck. Ulla:)))


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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Thanks so much, Ulla. My sister still teases me about all she got away with when we were growing up. One of these days, I'll get her back for it! So glad you enjoyed, Ulla. Peace, Lee

reply by Ulla on 16-Dec-2018
    Oh, I'm sure you will!
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Oh, you poor, abused baby! You beautifully recreated the futile resentment of every child who thinks life should be fair. Of course, at your age, you wouldn't have believed she knew your thoughts because she'd had them too when she was a kid. Great nostalgic humor. :) Nancy


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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Thanks so much, Nancy. Yes, I was abused. Even Linda admits it! Weird, but I find it so easy to slip back into Camden Street thinking. Every once in a while, I drive by the old house. I never see kids out in any of the yards. A shame. It was a pretty good place to grow up. Thanks again, and glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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This seems to describe everyone's childhood. How did we survive? These days, parents are told to 'recommend' chores for their children to participate in, so we wind up with a generation of millennials.


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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Thank you, Thomas. You, too, huh? To this day, I save certain chores for Saturday. But I never wash my windows. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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What a colorful write. I think you did a splendid job crafting this for the True Story prompt. Your descriptions, childhood perspective and wit shine through this read in stellar style. WEll done and good luck.. I enjoyed reading this story very much.

Melissa


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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Thank you, Melissa. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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This is why you are a top ranked author :) This was pure excellence! I felt as if I were right there inside the story, observing. I can definitely relate to Saturday chores.
I really got tickled over the language, the sarcasm and the thoughts of the younger version of you. It gave me a much-needed laugh. Your mom I can totally relate to.
Your mix of dialog and storytelling is exceptional!!!
I feel truly honored to have met you through your writing. I am just an inexperienced writer with a passion to write.
Thank you for sharing!


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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Thanks so much, C. Gale Burnett. I'm delighted you enjoyed this write. Inexperience is no match for passion. If you want to write, that's all you need. Write something splendid. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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I'm still rolling, Lee. In every which way. I can't imagine how one person can have so much in them and write about them with such moving prose. And this one is a true story too. I think I missed some vital stuff while growing up, in the mother-daughter realm. Or perhaps that's why I was bundled off to a boarding school at such a tnder age - to spare me the wrath of Mother Dear.

Splendind!


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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Thanks so much, apky. My parents often threatened to bundle me off to military school . . . or sell me to a circus. Instead, I washed windows. Oh, well. Glad you enjoyed. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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