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Thursday's Child - part IV


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Good morning, Gareth

Enjoyed the continuation. Virtual six. Liked how you set the scene to enhance the interaction and dialogue between your characters. had the distinct impression Sophia and Olivia's initial impression of the old woman was that she was harmless. Liked how the old woman gradually controlled the situation to the point she had Sophia glimpse part of her past life. Curious to see where this leads.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray


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Great story and writing Giraffmang...I'm going to go back and read parts I, II and III.
Looking forward to part V.
As someone who believes in messages and messengers, I found this very easy to follow and be engrossed (in?).
Again, impressive and thank you for sharing ;o)
Lynda (LynSys)


 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018


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This continuation where Sophia visits a psychic is colorful and unique. You kept raising the tension as the appointment proceeded by the closed eyes, hand holding, and expectations of something happening. your use of color was a good point and added visual imagery to this write. Well done.


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First I have read of your work. I was pleased by your sense of scene and the movement of the piece. it was well written and kept my attention throughout.

Rob


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Yep, I'll take this advice to heart. Sounds about as good as any psychotherapist could give and charge a fortune for:

Unless you do something you will be destined to repeat the same things over and over until the end of time - living the same day again and again. Don't stagnate. Make your life worth living, before it's too late.

Brilliant, G.

Wish you all the happiness for the festive season!


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Hmm. Seems like a good job for a psychology major. I think as long as you're observant, you could do this job. Lol. But you did already give us a lot of the information beforehand.

Question:
"The little, white woman placed" (Do you mean white as in white-haired or Caucasian?)


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Hi, G. I sure like the imagery in this chapter:

" Lazy coils of smoke floated in the stillness of the interior of the psychic's premises, giving everything a blueish tinge. The jangle of a bell over the door gave the place a quaint touch." (Outstanding

And here: "She had a face that used to be described as lived-in. The woman's lips moved in silence and her eyes darted from side to side rapidly beneath closed lids, nostrils flaring with each breath. "

Very good throughout and great storytelling, my friend. It may be my imagination, but I feel that this is the best you have ever done pertaining to detail.

Bless you and Happy Holidays G. I am glad to give this six stars. (why it did not register a six is beyond me?? But I will find out, my friend. Bob


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Cheers, Mr. G;
>Excellent portrayal of Sophie and her sister, especially with their bantering and familiarity with each others do's and don'ts.
>The ending was a good way to extend a moral and made the relationship bond more, between Sophie and Olivia, even more so after Sophie's vision.
>Enjoyed and very entertained
>Thanks and Have a merry.
Alx


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This was worth reading for the good advice, Gareth, apart from the fact it's a darned good read. I'm going to see a psychic in the New Year with a friend, I hope she sees me selling millions of books, or me winning the lottery! lol, doubt either will happen. Now, what will Sophia do? Will she take the bull by the horns and grab a bit of life? We will see. Will we find out what her sister's future holds? I'm loving this story, my friend. :) Sandra xxx


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Wow, Is that ever some advice I could take to heart. I often think of my life as repeating over and over and it makes me so sad. This is a very interesting story so far. You have me hooked. Not much I can do about my situation, but maybe I will enjoy solving hers. Good Job G. Write on! Nancy :)


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