SIX STAR worthy. This is a great poem, mystery writer. I wish I had a sixth star left to give you. This is very well thought out and presented in such a way that no matter one's religion, or lack thereof, each can relate to this write.
"we all huddle here, a mass yearning to be free of fear" ... luv this! Yes, each and every one of us wishes for this. "but in the distance we see lights and we hear singing" ... I lovely symbol of hope for peace and joy. "what is it about?" ... terrific concluding line. "is shelter a miraculous present" ... question mark after present ... present? Love your title too!
Best wishes for the contest with this exceptional entry.
This is succinct and very much to the point. Each line of this talented poet's work is woven with the golden threads of truth. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Freedom comes with a sense of hope for a better life which everyone on this earth is entitled to. Your free verse poem spells persecution and your verse hopes for an end to persecution with freedom the reward.
Great writing, hope you do well in the competition.