Mr. Justice
A Justice steps up to help.
Pays: 10 points.
1.14 member dollars
Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

Status

New Here?
Sign Up
Fast! Three Questions.

Already a member?
Login

Contests

6 Word Poetry
Deadline: In 2 Days

Cinquain Poetry
Deadline: In 4 Days

3 Line Poetry Contest
Deadline: In 5 Days

Flash Fiction
Deadline: Sep 30th

80 Word Flash Fiction
Deadline: Oct 1st


Writing Classes

0 classes available. Click here locate a class and to learn more.

Rank

Poet: None
Author: None
Novel: None
Reviewer:None
Votes: None






Reviews from
it is you, fair moon


lune-contest entry

  9 total reviews 
Comment by
Pearl Edwards
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  73
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  158
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
What I like, and what struck me straight off is the sadness of your words - cradles my crushed heart - but the moon pic you've chosen is the smiley moon..
hedging your bets and having fun mike, enjoyed it.
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018


Comment by
GregoryCody
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  144
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  581
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Love the assonance in you and moon, alliteration in the S with safely, cradlES and cassonance in the hard C. It's crazy how many poetic tools you used in just a few words. Not to mention a deep message. I really like this my friend!


 Comment Written 20-Dec-2018


Comment by
Liz O'Neill
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  325
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  41
Review Stars
  Rank:  94
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Oh wow. So precious a concept. I can picture the image. The moon has such quietness, no need for words. When we have a broken heart, the last thing we need is words. Well expressed.


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2018


Comment by
rama devi
May All Beings Be Happy
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  51
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  
 Rank:  102
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Poignant and impacting in so few words. A well done lune, aptly addressed to the moon. Cradles and crushed make great alliterative effect! Would be great to fit in crescent in there!

Example;

It's you, crescent moon,


Fair works fine, though, too.

Good luck!

Warmly, rd


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
    Aww ... thanks so much. Big smiles. So pleased you enjoyed. "Crescent" is very enticing, but I like the double meaning of "fair" quite a bit. You do have me torn though. :)) mike

reply by rama devi on 20-Dec-2018
    :-)))
Comment by
patcelaw
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  34
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  35
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  110
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Michael, this is a great lune poem for the contest. Many blessings for your day and I wish you a very Merry Christmas. Patricia


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2018


Comment by
Pantygynt
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  89
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  4
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  31
 

#4 Ranked Novelist
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
That is a rather lovely little saying in the classic lune form with some neat alliteration on the CR sound in the final line. Well thought out and constructed. The crescent shape is not unlike the idea of a cradle.


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2018


Comment by
Tootsie55
 
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Good work, mate. So much said in so few words. Good luck in the contest.Now to write enough words to satisfy FS. You chose a good picture for this as well. See you around.


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2018


Comment by
BOO ghost
 
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Has metamorphic meaning.

The crescent moon does resemble a rocking cradle.

Your transparent spirit can float to the moon, soar like a Loon in a dream...

Exceptional Loon! Rats! BOO used up his nuggets

Good luck in the money contest!!


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2018


Comment by
country ranch writer
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  276
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  129 (+1)
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  208
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
nice presentation for this short but sweet poem. Broken hearts sometimes end on the phase of the moon but it is the heart that really suffers when it is over.


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2018


  -1-   Next Page 


Market your book.
Advertising options.
Football Chapter 1 part 1
A mother faces life's struggles.


Share or Bookmark
  Contact Us | En español | Advertise With Us

© 2015 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy