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Alex wants a promotion but discovers a dark secret

  7 total reviews 
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2018 Novelist of the Year.
2017 Short Works and 2017 Script Writer of the Year.
Thomas Bowling
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Wow! was this a story or a novel? It sounds like Alex worked for a strange company. The writing is well-done with no errors. This is an excellent contest entry and will do well in the voting booth. Good luck.


 Comment Written 05-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
    Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Vicky Klebs
 
 
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This work has reached the exceptional level
This was great! Chilling and so realistic. I loved that I had no idea what direction we were going in and that the ending was so perfectly simple, but still thought provoking.


 Comment Written 05-Jan-2019


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dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Keep right on
writing on
 
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An extremely long posting. I would divide it into two to get more reviews. I'm noy sure why you slipped into script form a couple times and would revise those those lines. Best wishes to you with your writing, my friend~Debbie


 Comment Written 05-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
    Thank you for your advice.
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susand3022
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Good Morning Jason! OMG! Where did your imagination come from?!?!! I just loved this! What a cool and original, at least to me, idea. I haven't had a chance to read much new stuff in the last few years. I used to read a lot of horror as a kid and then changed over to more historical fiction when Diana Gabaldon came out with her Outlander series. I really enjoyed this read, though it took me a couple of days to get through over the holidays, I kept getting interrupted! A great tale with a bizarre twist!


 Comment Written 26-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
    Thank you!

    Please feel free to visit my blog, too (https://jasonkilgore.blogspot.com), my facebook page, "Strange Worlds of Jason Kilgore", and follow on Twitter @WorldsKilgore
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Jaye Bennett
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What a fascinating concept. I hope this isn't going to be a stand-alone, but will be added to as time goes by. Your idea of what is happening in Alex's office sounds about as reasonable as other theories I have heard. The story is subtle. The only negative is I would like to see "more show" and "less tell." Good job.


 Comment Written 25-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
    Thank you very much. :) I appreciate the feedback.

    Please feel free to visit my blog, too (https://jasonkilgore.blogspot.com), my facebook page, "Strange Worlds of Jason Kilgore", and follow on Twitter @WorldsKilgore
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Ricky1024
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This was well-written Richard Seaman imagery flowed Wells a Treadwell with no grammar issues as I delve further into an OC adjectives an object the contents were both excellent and exceptional but rather lengthy scripted measures aligned perfectly happy holidays talk to Ricky 1024


 Comment Written 25-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
    Thank you. :)

    Please feel free to visit my blog, too (https://jasonkilgore.blogspot.com), my facebook page, "Strange Worlds of Jason Kilgore", and follow on Twitter @WorldsKilgore
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C. Gale Burnett
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C. Gale Burnett
 
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Excellent writing, excellent storytelling. The story flowed easily, held interest, and came to a climax towards the end. A great read!
Having held jobs both below management and in management (human resources), this story drew me in. I could relate to both sides, and, even though this was fiction, it held so much truth.
I am envious of all that creativity you've got going on in your head. This is truly great writing!
I am going to 'follow you' now :)
Thanks for sharing!
C. Gale Burnett


 Comment Written 24-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
    Thank you!

    Please feel free to visit my blog, too (https://jasonkilgore.blogspot.com), my facebook page, "Strange Worlds of Jason Kilgore", and follow on Twitter @WorldsKilgore
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