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Lost on Planet Z


Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Decontamination?"

This is a sci-fi book especially for girls.

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Well 10% human is better than none, yes? LOL. We humanoids do need those bacteria to survive.

Another fascinating chapter to read how the decontamination works out. Sorry I got somewhat behind in reviewing, Helen, but your novel remains hugely fascinating to me. :)

Gloria


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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    Oh thank you, Gloria! I'm glad you are still following. But am glad you had time away to enjoy the holidays. Hugs!
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Helen,

It's always interesting to see how you insert the sciency stuff. *smile* This was a cool chapter but I think I must have missed something - I was sick with a cold the last few days and couldn't visit.

Staying tuned!


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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
    I'm so sorry that you were sick. It's terrible to be sick during the holidays. Hope you're fully recovered. Thanks for reviewing. Hugs!!
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This is a brave new step forward. I like how we get a little trivia as well as we meet new characters. I know that especially younger readers would flip for this story.


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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
    Thanks so much for saying that, Bill! Appreciate you kind review! Blessings on your New Year!
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I liked your description of "a cartoon, monster voice" in a high register and your point that ninety percent of our cells are bacteria. Good suspense at the end too. To be continued... -Joan


 Comment Written 29-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
    Thank you for continuing to humor me in my little imaginary tale, Joan! Appreciate you!! Hugs!

reply by Joan E. on 29-Dec-2018
    You have such a good imagination--I look forward to the next chapter of this tale. Big smiles- Joan
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Well, now that was like asking us what kind of sauce and toppings we'd like on our ice cream and then saying....oh, ice cream will be out later! :) ;) LOL! LOL! Great, as my boys would say, 'bait', Helen -- now I really want to read the next segment! :) :) Good job and great science covered all in one fell swoop! :) :) Happy New Year! :) Yvette :)


 Comment Written 29-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
    Yay! You liked it and you want to read more. Can't ask for better than that. I found that my previous post was so long that I got fewer reviews. So I am trying to keep it down to 700 words or less. Thanks so much for the support!
    Happy New Year!!
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Isn't it funny Helen? As you've created some things that I hadn't calculated, the thought of carrying something we have that is harmful to others. I guess that's why the aboriginals of other countries died from the common cold the white settlers brought in. A wonderfuly clever and thoughtful, and yet entertaining episode, well done, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 29-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
    Thank you so much for the kind review, Roy! I'm glad you could see some correlation to our own history.
    Appreciate your thoughtful comments!
    Happy New Year to you and yours!

reply by royowen on 29-Dec-2018
    Well done
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The story is good, but you break it up with too many other posts between chapters. It makes it hard to follow. It is start and stop in its presentation. My mind isn't that good.


 Comment Written 29-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
    Lol. Your mind is just fine, Tom. Appreciate you stopping to review. Just think how my mind works - in little patches and skips and starts. Blessed New Year!
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A new adventure with the Gozztee for Hen and Bah-Bee. First comes decontamination. A good read and clearly expressed. Nuances of characters is very good as is dialogue between Hen and Gozztee voice. Marilyn


 Comment Written 29-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
    Thank you so much for continuing to follow this story, Marilyn. I finally have a glimpse of where I'm going with this. Hugs!
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I'm jumping into your story a little late. I enjoy science fiction :) This is a fascinating story with believable characters that I'm drawn to. You caught my interest and I will check in from time to time.

- "We Gozztee are (very) hygienic " - very is one of those words that writers are advised to avoid. It all has to do with that show don't tell concept. I find when I use alternate words I am pleased with the outcome. You don't have to like it, and are free to write as you like. I'd change it to, "nauseatingly hygienic" or, "thoroughly". There is a plethora of options in the thesaurus.

Keep writing. This is a terrific story.

Joy xx


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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
    Thanks so much for stopping by to read my prose, Joy! I'll think about the addition of the adverb. It's just that the Gozztee consider themselves in a class by themselves. Appreciate the thoughtful review! Happy New Year!!
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Hi Helen,

Earthlings use soap and water to decontaminate, but the Gozztee use light ... I found this most interesting. Ninety percent of the cells on humans are bacteria ... wow! That's incredible! I love that you've incorporated true scientific data into your story to help make it more realistic and plausible.

I may be getting this wrong, Helen, but should this part start on a new line as it seems to be a different speaker? I'm thinking it's the Gozztee speaking here ... "You prefer lower? How about this register? The voice should sound like a cartoon register.

Another very entertaining chapter, Helen!

Hugs,
Connie


 Comment Written 29-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
    Oh yes! You are so right. I thought that I fixed that but it's definitely a change in speaker. Thank you so much for the helpful review, Connie! Hugs!!
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