This quatern, Meticulous Busy Beeing, has the proper formatting and suggests that time allows for so little that so much has to fit into. We may live a life, but it's returns may be lost to productivity.
I really like this! It is a perfect Quatern. Love the rhyme, love the perfect punctuation, love the font size, color and style, love the illustration.
I mostly love the smooth reading of your poem and the exquisite, detailed planning of your day's schedule, and things so going amuck. You put a lot of thought to this Quatern, and it shows. This is a great contest entry. I truly wish you the very, very best!
This is quite an accomplishment, to be able to end every line with the same sound. Your poem is also amusing, especially with the metaphors. The crux of the message here and the meaning of life: "Time's plan? A dire catastrophe!" This makes this poem universal. Whom us has not cursed this truth. I'm voting for this one. Well written.
The poem flows well. My interpretation is that the carefulness of the speaker in all that she does has led to things well-planned, but perhaps too much planning has led to a life that is stale ("Now, somehow, I've no memories / I've planned each moment carefully."). Definitely a pitfall for someone (like me) who has to be super-organized. My only critique is that the rhyme is a bit too loose in the second and fourth stanzas.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
Great interpretation, on the money. I did have an odd rhyme scheme, kind of an aaca, bbcb something or other. I took your notice to heart and changed it to a monorhyme. :)) Thanks for a helpful and positive review. :))