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Lost on Planet Z


Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Peeztee"

This is a sci-fi book especially for girls.

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The continued investigation of this uniquely imagined planet make for a calm excitement (if this oxymoron is acceptable), which presents itself with new and possibly dangerous circumstances that we accept as more adventure than peril.


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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Thank you for that fun and descriptive review, Bill. Actually, our city is known as the "City of Subdued Excitement." So a "calm" one is fine, too. Appreciate your continuing to follow this. Blessings!
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I must bear in mind that if I ever have lunch with a robot and they offer me nuts, they might not be referring to pecan or macadamia. Another well-written instalment. If I were Hen, I don't think I'd be happy about my best and only jacket being incinerated, either. Keep up the good work :)

Craig


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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
    Thank you, Craig! I thought you might be checking for your own bioluminescence, instead of thinking about nuts.. Lol. Blessings!
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LOL! Okay, I was giggling in reading this as it's akin to reading about Vulcans to some extent. ;) A great one and I look forward to more interaction between those two! ;) Yvette ;)


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Yes, they are rather opposite, aren't they? Thanks so much for the review, Yvette! Blessings!
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This planet is very strange using robots to to do their bidding. Just what do they eat?Guess we will find out next chapter so until then I did you a due. Curious.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Barbara. I know sci-fi isn't everyone's thing so I appreciate you taking the time! Hugs!

reply by country ranch writer on 04-Jan-2019
    I am trying to understand more on the si if end of things.
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I admired your vivid description in the opening paragraph that made the reader visualize the environment so well. Your comparison to a "cat with a sock over" and "molting snake" were just right. I was surprised that Peeztee was like a computer and was probably going to be "sterilized". Sighs- Joan


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Thank you, Joan. You totally got the different culture of the Gohzztee that I was trying to get across. Appreciate your observant review! Hugs!

reply by Joan E. on 05-Jan-2019
    You did well in conveying the difference and I am glad I was receptive. Hugs- Joan
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Second attempt to review before computer kicks me out: Love the characters, they're fun to imagine and I can see youngsters will find it fascinating. No Spag.
I always must go to an encyclopedic source after reading your stories, Helen. You challenge me. Never heard of human bioluminescence.
Reminds me of study in the 80's, or so, in which plants and humans are tested in their reactions to each other. The idea was to prove/disprove whether some are acually sensitive and able to care for plants when others can't. It showed an energy that is visible as a light force between the two when they touch. The plant discerns positive and negative human 'emotions' when touched. When they do touch, an explosion of light occurs. Ain't that cool?!
Is this bioluminescence?


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Wow! That is so cool. I wonder if it isn't the electricity in the nerves that the plants are reacting to? The bioluminescence in humans isn't visible to human vision but apparently it's very low and varies throughout the day. I just learned about it.
    Thank you so much for the informative review and super rating, Patti! Appreciate you!!

reply by LaRosa on 04-Jan-2019
    the 'visual' on the electrical charge can only be seen under a special light...been so long that I'm guessing it would be blue lights. when the finger comes close to the plant it either recoils or stays in place. When touched there is an electrical burst of light. cool, huh.
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I loved you characters:
Bah-Bee looked at Peeztee, and I sensed a growing consternation and disapproval of our host. My eyes switched back and forth between the two. They could be twins except that Peeztee looked robotic and didn't show any kind emotion.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Thank you, Diana! So good to see you again. Hope all has been well with you.
    Yes, this was a sci-fi I started late last year. Thanks for reading and reviewing! Hugs!
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Hello lyenochka
You seem to have an excellent way to keep readers full attention, I know you had mine, especially when ( I believe it was Peeztee) who is so worried about every thing must be sterile an no Bacteria, makes me fear for Henrietta
survivor is Henrietta who is the only the only survivor . Gert
I wonder if you could give us a list of the chacters in your sci fiction story and who they are?


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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    That's a great idea, Gert! Appreciate you! Will add the character list. Hugs!
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What a shock seeing the Gohztee, and then the robotic Peeztee, (I'm getting a headache with these names heh, heh) after which poor Hen loses her biotech jacket after sterilisation occurs, I wonder what will happen to Hen as she is a walking bacterial factory, inside and out, heh heh, well done, (you might have factor in some modification to the bacterial thing Helen,) well done, good episode, blessings, Roy


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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Lol. Thank you, Roy! I'm so glad you see the fun and humor! Blessings!!

reply by royowen on 04-Jan-2019
    Well done Helen
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Helen,

Another super chapter. Had no idea about human bioluminescence. Wow. What we learn every day. hahaha! Can you imagine what poor Bah-bee thought when that 'skin' came off?

Some notes, if I may?
1.) "After all the information I (gather) from you is uploaded

2.) "Can you also speak to Bah-Bee(?)" I interrupted, surprised at his ignoring

3.) Oh boy! I wonder(ed) what they would feed us(?) (N)uts and bolts?

I enjoyed!


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Isn't our own bodies and world so marvelous? Thanks so much for the helpful review, Robyn!
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