Jason, if thiis is you ... you may be a little worried!! As a woman, I'm going to stop you in your tracks right now and disabuse you of the notion that for some reason men think women don't like kissing. Well, we do! We LOVE that shit!!! Yup... hold my hand and give me little kisses all day long..... can't ever go wrong there! lol (sounds good, but I'd probably be kicking you away after the first few minutes because I had laundry to do... oh well... life gets in the way...) That's why we still like kissing... get's those endorphines going and it's quick and you can do it anywhere!!! LOL Love the hand-holding! Don't give up the kisses! lol
Love the sentiments expressed in your 5/7/5 poetic offering. And they are sentiments to which I can relate: married for nearly 40 years, and I still love to feel my husband's hand in mine. Thank you for sharing and best wishes!
Certainly a lovely offering for the contest, Jason -- I would suggest, however, that you do not need the punctuation in such a short form...the line breaks take care of the 'pauses' for you. Also, you don't need the capitalization at the beginning of each line....I know the word processor tends to 'automatically' insert caps there, just manually change them. Some authors do keep the one at the beginning, however, once again, the short form really makes it unnecessary...:) :) All suggestions...feel free to employ or ignore. thank you for sharing! :)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
Thank you for your good critique. I agree, and will go in and change it.