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Dean Kuch
 
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Well, Anonymous Poet.
Every rose has it's thorn, yes?
Ah, how many of us pine for those carefree, halcyon days of our youth, 'eh?
When life was still fun, indeed...
...best wishes to you in the contest.
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 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
    anonymous I shall remain #1... I love that you are reminiscing about youthful halcyon day... Mine... not so much I was into everything. Eventually I realized that discretion was sometimes called for... thanks #1

reply by Dean Kuch on 11-Jan-2019
    U R welcome. photo worthy1_zpsxuums0ju.gif
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nancyjam
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I love these memories of a young child who faced her world with enthusiasm and no fear.
Wonderful descriptive images that bring the readeer into her world.
Isn't it a time we can look around us and see and feel like her.
What joy! Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Nancy


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
    thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
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Boogienights
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This is a great contest entry. I have experienced all of what is talked about in this poem, and your words help me to unlocked memories of those times. I wish you the best in this contest.


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
    thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
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nomi338
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Poor mom, she desires a pretty little princess and gets instead, a roustabout. A roustabout who loves roaming the countryside, laying waste to all within her path, disdaining all daintiness and refusing a bath.


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    You got it... definitely poor Mom and her not such a princess... hee... yours, diana
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I enjoyed the read of this poem. The author's words were
joyful, descriptive and creative. The poem flows and
connects well. I found the words of this poem delightful.
The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much harmony 13... I completely appreciate your thoughts and words... yours, diana
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Hi,
Recently I was told that my reviewing basicly sucks. So this week,
this is my review. I'm taking a survey... Would you rather:
A: Have a true review
B: Have a certain 5-star generic review
Choose wisely and be sure of your choice so I can save myself the
needless time and tears over those who don't want to hear them.
I'll make a list.
And remember.... LEARNING IS EARNING


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    Hi susanand3022... I hear you... it can get brutal... I've been here off and on since 2004 and know that people take things personally... I personally want to grow... and there is also a certain diplomacy that may make the pill go down sweeter... I agree kiddo... earning is learning! I look forward to reading your work...

reply by susand3022 on 10-Jan-2019
    Dear Author,
    I hope this review is in time for the contest, which I wish you luck for if it is. I think your poem is very sweet and a nice reminder of the ease of childhood and the prickliness of growing up. (I just got pricked! lol) The only thing I can think of to suggest to you is to end your 7th line with a comma and start your 8th line with a lower case letter. Other than that it looks good to me. Best of luck, Susan

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
    You are a gem... thanks for the help
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Gert sherwood
 
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Hello author your entry for the contest My First Imaginings of the World of to create a character through brand new eyes... let us explore a new world with them..
I liked it why it as nice to read, because, when you said, of how you told us how a little girl is visioning what it would be like if her mom didn't watch over her,
Gert


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    Hey Gert... thanks for your lovely review. yours,

reply by Gert sherwood on 08-Jan-2019
    Smiles you are welcome author. Gert
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A very good combination of childlike giddiness and real life challenges. However, as you know, sometimes, we will not be spared the thorn. Just check the spacing in a few stanzas, and also, should say either, "the fragranceS are so sweet," or "the fragrance IS so sweet." Just a little singular/plural typo there. Keep up the good writing!


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    Hey Marc... thanks for your helpful and sage review. yours,
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You have created some great images here, and your writing is thoughtful and descriptive, would it be great to be six again, just for one summer day..


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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much for your sage review. yours, diana
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evesayshi
 
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In my opinion, a sweet and charming allegory of a moment in the life of a child - though a bit uneven in rhyming rhythm in just a couple of spots, it does not detract from the charm of the write and is easily corrected by reading the work aloud a couple of times - fully compliant with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    Hey thanks so much eve... I completely appreciate your review. yours

reply by evesayshi on 08-Jan-2019
    You are very welcome indeed - an endearing write, to be sure...Eve

reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019

reply by evesayshi on 09-Jan-2019
    Your comments are not appearing here - just to clarify my earlier response, for example ? I mentioned a couple of spots, so, with your permission:

    2nd line - I would delete the word "brand,"

    4th line - instead of "soaking up" - perhaps one word only instead of two, to smooth the rhythm more, such as, "gulping," "gobbling" or "drinking," still words a child would understand,

    10th line - instead of "optimistic," for this superb child's write, perhaps using, "believing that I'd stay clean," which again, may smooth the line, in addition to being more understandable to a child's mind,

    12th line - "Mom stayed inside with her dreams"

    Please do not be offended - these are suggestions only, which are as easily ignored as not...Eve

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