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Aww, this was a very sweet and well conducted poem. I've always wanted a house plant of my own, but I've been afraid that I'll forget to water it!! Best of luck in the contest.


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Hello there, this is such a cute little poem penned for your dying houseplant. You managed to put it into a full story from your rough day to singing to the dying plant up till rebirth. lol. Fantastic! Good luck! ~Kerry


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How beautiful the way your fern responds to your touch and to your voice. Why did you slap your fern? I truly enjoyed this amusing comical poem you construed here. Check out mine, also. liberty justice WELL DONE.


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I like to read stories that remind me that "little things,"are often mislabeled "big things," when we move from volume/weight to the emotional value created by all things of Nature.
Uplifting poem.


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THIS IS AN AMAZING CONTEST ENTRY
MY GRANDMOTHER LOVED HER PLANTS AND WOULD
TALK TO THEM ALL THE TIME, JUST A GREAT POEM
YOU HAVE A GREAT CHANCE AT WINNING THIS


 Comment Written 22-Jan-2019


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The rest of the night I softly sing;
hopefully, I soothe the tender (leaves). (thing) Otherwise it doesn't rhyme and throws the whole poem out of whack.

I plead that you stay awhile.
Your (lacy) green brings me (smiles.) (laci) I think that is the term when talking about plants. (smile) Again, rhyme out of whack.

Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing this delightful poem.


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I'm confused Artasylum - for all the couplet that you put up there were two that you could have made rhyme but you didn't why?
As an example -
Looking up there you are... I learn
my beautiful most cherished fern
The rest of the night I softly sing; as my chest heaves
hopefully, then I soothe the tender and lilting leaves
I'm just curious why in those lines you didn't rhyme? it wasn't too hard not to...
I like the overall entry for the contest... Good luck - but if you would like to use my suggestions and the contest is still on - please feel free... Cheers, Fonda


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I guess it's a little sad if your houseplant is your dearest friend. But you must water it in order to keep it going - just like any relationship! But perhaps it was a miracle that a new sprout emerged as you called out to the dear fern :))
Carol


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I wish I could have saved my lavender last year like you saved this plant. Sadly, I can't garden to save my life and every plant I bring home is doomed from the very beginning. You did a great job and it was fun to read.


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Green plants doing the photosynthesis bit take out the bad and exhale the good as far as homo sapiens goes...I remember this prompt from long ago. Excellent post.


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