HELLO POET: I like your posting that you have posted here in that it brings to my mind a song that we sing in my family. "Oh, Lord, my God all I desires is You. No riches on earth can match your worth...nothing here can compare with You. What can this world offer...when all I desire is You?" When I sing this song it makes me feel like you feel. "Oh, God You are the air that I breathe...therefore You are my life. Thank you for sharing, poet. God bless you and yours. Cordially: rhonnie69.
You've written an excellent poem of couplets
with both exact and near rhymes.
The story of why the plant needs to live,
because it provides much needed comfort,
is well done.
Excellent ending, as the plant responds to the plea,
is quite appropriate.
Good luck in the contest
-A beautiful fern and very nice presentation.
-I like the lilt to your poem, as you
describe getting home and greeting your fern.
-The rhyming couplets add to the effect.
-You create a regretful tone when
you see a brown patch, and whack at the plant.
-Now, you have to soothe it, and
yourself, I think, in order to get
it to thrive; the result was worth it.
-A good entry; good luck.
After I read this I had to go talk to my ferns and baby them a little bit! I love the way you used the green letters in the perfect fern green shade. Great poem and super read. Good luck and best wishes.
This is Great. Your voice is solid and the cadence gives it a cool little bounce, levity almost. Your word choices are unique and pleasant to read. Some favorites are:
Spinning, panic attack
Nice assonance in lacy green brings
This is great! I wanted to write one too but couldn't think of a thing to say. I really loved the emotion
you put into this..I myself am in love with a rubber tree plant. :) Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.