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Betty Sue Was a Wild Child


She was wild and loose as a goose.

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dragonpoet
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This is a story of a wild party girl. She sounds a little crazy but loves to dance. I think it should be 'as' loose as a goose. This statement usually would mean she had sex a lot but the last stanza said she rarely took her clothes off. That is contradictory. Otherwise a good poem
Keep writing
Joan


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019
    Loose as a goose in her dancing. Thanks great review. Contest ended and I won first. lolol liberty justice

reply by dragonpoet on 28-Aug-2019
    Thanks for the clarification.
    You are most kindly welcome.
    Joan

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019
    Hi dragonpoet, I just nominated you for reviewer. lolol liberty justice
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This is an older poem, but it made me smile. Congratulations for winning first prize in the contest which is a wonderful honor for you. I don't know anyone like this, but I suppose many others may. Marilyn


 Comment Written 29-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019
    Thanks so much my dear fan story friend. lolol liberty justice
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Liberty--
in my estimation you fail in the last line. This is a terrific poem up until then and then you just poop out in the last line. You pull a half assed moralism out to...basically punish a woman I feel you love and admire, particularly for her sexuality, and then do not have the guts to say so, to follow through.

That's my feeling.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff


 Comment Written 14-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
    I don't know what to say.
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Joan E.
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I missed this post and am delighted I had the opportunity to read it now. Congratulations on having the poem win the contest. It certainly tells the true story of a special girl. I have not know anyone like this "wild child" character but could visualize her antics with your vivid descriptions. Cheers- Joan


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
    Thanks Joan loveky review lolol liberty justice
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Congratulations for your win in this contest. You did a great job with this portrayal of a wild girl kicking up her boots. Fun artwork with bright colors adds to the write. You did a fine job and I will read more of your work as time allows.

Blessings


 Comment Written 05-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
    Yes please do. Thanks lovely stars.
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I like this I could probably mention a few but places I would mention them from they took all their clothes off but I don't believe any wore blonde wigs some red lipstick though well written take care have a blessed weekend dr. Ricky 1024


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks Ricky lovely stars. Contest ended. lolol liberty justice
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David Listenbee
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Hey Liberty,

I'll bet the young goslings are still dreaming bout Betty Sue!
and I've got a funny feeling, that Betty Sue Is non other than, YOU!
I had fun reading your poem. I'll be back to read more!

Blessings
David


 Comment Written 28-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
    Thanks lovely stars and funny comments and for wishing me good luck in contest today. No, I wasn't that wild. You are a great reviewer. Read more of my writings, also. liberty justice

reply by David Listenbee on 28-Jan-2019
    I"M gonna read em all! :-)

    David

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
    Do you work with a charity? Send a list of charities that give out money to pay bills for my children and myself. Thanks for wishing me good luck in contest today. You are a great writer. Read my writings, also. liberty justice
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Cheers, Liberty Justice;
>In a roundabout way I found out that this is your writing by going to your profile.
>I like the rhyming couplets in a variable many of them are contingently supportive and relative to the conceptual theme of each line bringing the stanzaic enjambment flowing smoothly. Some new rhymes are very good like child and smile, Oh I would prrobably have preferred to write somewhere where I could use mild, wild, piled, styled, filed, defiled, beguiled and compiled. Do you use ~'rhymezone.com"~. If not, check it out!
>Yes, I knew many Of these type of characters, When I worked with children At a summer handicap children's retreat in Rochester New York in '71. There were nearly 38 of 40 different physical and mental disabilities and one of these disabilities, or what I should write is an ability much like that of Betty Sue. Chuckle!
>I like your idea of the obscure and un-tangible picture, as it leaves it up to the audience to fill in the blanks after reading your writing. Excellent ploy.
> Good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one my friend especially where everyone loves you dearly.
Alx















 Comment Written 27-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
    Thanks krys123 for your radiant and humorous comments. I must try rhymezone.com. Thanks for supporting me in this contest.

reply by krys123 on 28-Jan-2019
    You're very welcome, Liberty Justice, I've been using rhymezone.com for writing poetry for four years now. It also does synonyms, quotes, and a variety of other 15 combination and areas of definitions or relativity to the word.
    > Take care and have a good one.
    Alx

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reply by krys123 on 28-Jan-2019
    You betcha, Liberty Justice.
    Alx

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
    Thanks for lovely stars and sympathetic comments. Thanks for wishing me good luck in contest today.

reply by krys123 on 28-Jan-2019
    You're very welcome.
    Alx

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
    Thanks for lovely stars and sympathetic comments. Thanks for wishing me good luck in contest today.

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
    After contest send me your name and type it here because name does not show.

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
    Who is this? You have to type your name in these supplies or writer can't see your name. Thanks.

reply by krys123 on 29-Jan-2019
    Cheers, Liberty Justice
    Alx Krys, (krys123)? that's who I am. What you supply and why can't they later see my name? I am confused, I think? Chuckle!
    Alx
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Yeah we all know of a Betty Sue - a bit wild - a bit crazy - life of the party girl - yeah when life was fun - looking back we miss it don't we - when everything was funny - jokes and laughter - fun and games - I liked your poem - when going out dancing and romancing was the Friday night ritual - thanks for sharing your tale - respectfully Ron


 Comment Written 27-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
    Thanks TheStory Man for lovely stars and for supporting me and wishing me luck in contest today.
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This poem, Betty Sue was a Wild Child, reminds me, and I'm sure all the readers, of that one girl who was everyone's dream girl, in the party-loving frame of mind.


 Comment Written 27-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
    Thanks for lovely stars and for supporting me and wishing me luck in contest today.
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