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In Defense of the Human Race


a one act play

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This is amusing and the human race is ultimately saved by a cat, which is probably par for the course.

'You shouldn't have said the 'c' word!' The trouble is you have two 'C' words, 'curious' and 'colonization' another word that could very well be taboo given the context of the play. I would suggest leaving only one to avoid confusion.

A word to the wise. If you write plays with a view to professional performance keep the cast small. The smaller the cast the cheaper the play will be to produce but the the audience will still pay the same for a seat.

If on the other hand you are writing for performance in schools have as large a cast as possible so as many kids get a starring role as possible.


 Comment Written 27-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
    Thanks for your words of wisdom, Jim. Appreciate your tips. I did purposefully use two 'c' words to show how the prof completely missed the point.
    Appreciate the detailed review! Blessings!
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Oh this entry made me laugh! All of us humans definitely owe Sassy and Cara a debt of gratitude. This is a wonderful entry for the contest. Good luck!


 Comment Written 27-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much. I'm so happy that you got a laugh from it. I was wondering if only trekkies would find it funny. Much appreciated! Have a super week!

reply by TheStoryMan on 28-Jan-2019
    I have friends who are Trekkies so I understood the concept of teleportation. It was a funny story.
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Hi Helen,

I enjoyed your script. Great characters. I love that they messed up and brought little Cara instead of her mamma. Sounds like you bought us some time. Whew! Crisis averted for now.

Best wishes in the contest. You have a dilly here that puts mine to shame.

Joy xx


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Aww. Thank you, Joy. You're so sweet to say that. I'm enjoying your Lottie and Rose scripts! Hugs!
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You are exceptional at Script writing, Lyenochka. I am so behind in my reviewing, but when I saw your name, I checked to see if it was a script. I did not want to miss it even though, to use Sasha's term, I am having to zap so much of my message box.
This post did not disappoint. You will win this contest for sure. I love the comment about the sophomore being a wise fool. You knowledge of word derivation just amazes me. Plus you use it to entertain.
Nice job. I am counting on a win here.


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much, Debbie! I really appreciate your kind encouragement. The competition is stiff so I don't know who'll win but am blessed that you liked it. Hugs!!
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Haha, there is so much that is clever in this great script you've penned, Helen. Not least, the names. I'm sure Professor Agape considers his or her name most appropriate. I'm wondering how many readers will get the TRS80 reference. That was actually the second computer I owned, Zilog Z80 based... talk about a blast from the past!

Somehow I doubt the intergallactic consortium would find us in the slightest bit interesting. I think they would most likely regard humans as Voltaire's travelers did - rather unintelligent insects, our exaggerated sense of self-importance worthy of fits of uncontrollable laughter. Still, I very much enjoyed your story.
Good job, Craig


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    I was hoping someone would recognize that! You must be much younger than me because the TRS80 was my little brother's and I remember the BASIC programming had to be saved onto cassette tapes. My first COBOL programming was done on a DEC PDP/11 (owned by the college) We didn't own a PC (even though we used IBM mainframes at work,) until the late 1980's. Thanks for the fun review, Craig.

reply by CD Richards on 26-Jan-2019
    I'm not so sure, Helen. The PDP11's where I worked were programmed in Pascal, but we also had a PDP-8 which was programmed in a language called Focal-8. Programs were punched onto paper tape, and loaded by toggling in a bootstrap program in binary through a set of toggle switches on the front. The first computer I owned was a Dick Smith Super 80, which arrived as a box with a PCB and a bunch of diodes, resistors and capacitors. It had an LED display (no CRT), and was programmed in hexadecimal via a keyboard. I think that dates me a little lol


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Oh -- well, that may just mean you were into computers before I was. I remember having a dumb terminal at home and the most hardware I ever had to deal with was to change the settings of the dip switches to be able to connect to my university's VAX machines. Beyond that, my only hw experience was changing keyboards and swapping sound cards. But that was only a few times. You're the computer guru.

reply by CD Richards on 26-Jan-2019
    I was good at my job, when it involved computers, and I have no doubt you were as well :) I tended to get bored easily, and thus went from job to job. I probably picked up aout 20 languages, at least, at a passable level (no exaggeration) as well as tinkering with hardware, but didn't really master any to a high degreel. I'm sure your COBOL would run rings around mine.
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Funny! Great names for the characters. Very enjoyable, and fun characters. The dream thing turned out fine. Maybe it was the pizza. Nice addition with the cat. Animals are such scene stealers, and the little girl was adorable. Easy to follow format. judi


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much, Judi! Loved your entry. Blessings on your weekend!!

reply by judiverse on 27-Jan-2019
    You're welcome. I enjoyed your light-hearted approach. I don't think we really have much control over what happens to Earth. More powerful forces than man at work. judi
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Your awesome imagination continues to impress me. This was well written and a lot of fun to read. I wish you all the best in this prompt contest entry. You also have a terrific sense of humor.


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much, Sasha! I'm honored you said that cause I think you have a wonderful sense of humor! Hugs!
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This is a good play. Loved the characters and the German names. Just saw one nit, Lots of noise echo (echoes) among the audience. Interesting how you made it out to be a dream. Good job.

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 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    I know - it's a cheesy exit but it could have happened and he was teleported there and it felt like the dream. I had "echoes" initially but I thought "lots" would be plural. Thanks for the careful reading and the encouraging review, Rhonda! Blessings!
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That was just plain fun to read!
I love everything about your script, it was so--human...
Thank God you had a shape shifting Silvarian added to the mix or we'd all be dead right now.
Excellent form, sci-fi with a bit of humor and a dash of intrigue. I love the kid, it fit so nicely into the scene, and the way you put her there was so believable to the rest of the story.

JT


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much for your enthusiastic review. I really appreciate our generous rating, too. Blessings!
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Hi Helen. I loved this. So enjoyable, amusing and entertaining. Cara is the nickname for my daughter, Caroline. Your story moves right along at a nice pace with interesting characters and humor. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn

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 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much, Marilyn! It's a little goofy but it's my take on the prompt. Appreciate you! Hope you enjoy singing this weekend! Hugs!
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