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A tale in five parts.

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Fantastic ending, you leave us with just a couple of things to think about. First, that Derwen is still dancing through those trees, and who know what she might think of a man walking through the woods? And then, of course, the Rottweiler lady and her gorgeous eyes...it does give one food for pondering :))
Well done, I love how you turned your woodland walk into a fabulous faery story.
Carol


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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
    The sequel involves another place you would like to walk in, the sand dunes of Merthyr Mawr Warren. Thank you for this lovely review.
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This is a great finish to this little story, and I will look forward to reading more about Ifan's life, out of the woodlands he'd always called home. Me, I like to think Derwen and Deryth are still there dancing the nights away. Great finish with the Rottweiler Lady's violet eyes.
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valda


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
    Another six stars. You are most generous. Thank you so much . Yes, you never know when you may meet up with these supernaturals. Sequel will be posted shortly.
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I am afraid I could never learn that language Jim. I am suppose to have a wee bit of Welch in me. One of my ancestors was the Prince of Wales. That is what my Grandmother said. At the time, I was not impressed, (I was a child.) Now I wonder. LOL Interesting story, well done. Nancy:)


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    I feel the same about it. It is not spoken much any more in this part of Wales, so there seemed little point in learning it, except to drop the odd word in for authenticity's sake. Things were very different back in the eighteenth century though. The industrial revolution had yet to make its mark and Wales was very rural back then and very -- well -- Welsh. I am still writing the first draft of the sequel but it will be up there in a week or two. Many thanks for your support with this.
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You really have us feeling sorry for poor devastated Ifan.

The soul-searching delay in the cottage adds nicely to the drama.

I enjoyed your further descriptions of the Fairy Folk. As well as the unique differences of the two women.

"Terpsichorean" now there' a new word to add to my vocabulary.

Loved your description of the change. Very poetic.

I'd have loved to meet Deryth when I was a young man.

I would be mesmerized by violet eyes. i am drawn to beautiful eyes like a magnet.

Excellent story overall. Excellent closing chapter. All worthy of a 6.


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    I have only come across eyes like that once in my life, when I was delivering flour from my mill to a bakers in Herefordshire. She was behind the counter and I only ever saw her the once, but they made a deep impression on me, and I am not one who notices eyes much. Thanks for all your reviews of this story. I should have the sequel out in a week or so.
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Hi, Jim

Well well well...

So poor ole Ifan was abandoned as he broke his promise and found all the beautiful tall trees had turned to knarled and twisted wrecks that were no use to the navy...

The part where the woodland reverts from one season to another is quite magical :)

So we are left wondering, should we venture into the woods, will we see these pretty witches, dance between the roots of the trees...

A lovely story from start to end.

Kind regards

tracey


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Thank you for all these lovely review. I am so pleased you have enjoyed the wrachod experience. There is a sequel that i am working on that I hope to post shortly. I hope I shall see you then.

reply by trimple on 29-Jan-2019
    PLeasure was all mine :)
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A very well-written chapter to end the story, We as humans seldom realize what we have is all we need until it is taken away from us and then we can never get it back.


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    That is so true. Thank you for your supportive reviews of this story.
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This is such an apt tale for today - how destructive greed can be, and how much it can cost us. For the sake of making easier money, how much Ifan lost. I look forward to reading more.

A tiny nit:
Deryth before her, was gone(,) and Ifan - no need for bracketed comma


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Yes of course. This sort of thing can always take its place as a fable but it started out just as a fairy story and kind of grew. Now I have nearly finished its longer sequel. Many thanks for your support.
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And a fascinating ending it is. The trees shall nevermore be used to float away.

I do so enjoy these folk myths and you've done a fine job with the Welsh tale, so hopefully you branch out and tell more. No pun intended. :)

Gloria


 Comment Written 28-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Thank you for your encouragement. I have almost finished the first draft of a longer sequel, which I hope to post here in a week or so.
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In many ways, I think this last chapter in the story is the finest. "the heavy anchor of his memory" is a particularly good metaphor, and "black as any raven's wing" is such a well-fitting simile for a folktale.

The alliteration in "terpsichorean curse" is poetic, an inspired combination to reinforce the strength of the curse with the two adjacent hard 'c' sounds.

I thought that your paragraph starting "Should you risk walking through that woodland at night" made a first class ending. You sum up the atmosphere of the place in a way that sends a shiver down the spine. I have known woodlands that have that effect, especially when the light is fading.

It sounds as if that Rottweiler Lady has worked a little faerie magic on you!

The promise of a sequel is tantalising.


 Comment Written 28-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Another six stars from you. I am indeed honoured. Thank you for this kind review. I had a feeling someone would make the remark you make in your final sentence. I regret to say that we passed on the footpath like ships in the night and her violet eyes were as much a reality as Deryth herself.

    The real violet eyes that impressed me so much were spotted behind the counter of a Herefordshire baker's shop where I was delivering flour from my mill. That was thirty years ago and I never saw her again.
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He didn't realize the gravity of his promise to leave the trees alone. However, a promise is a promise. Now he'll roam the countryside alone and heartbroken. I look forward to reading about his life now.


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the encouraging review. There will be a short break while I finish writing the first draft of the sequel as it is turning out to be a bit longer than Coden wrachod. But is nearly there.
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